Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Clarify and correct grammar, use a clear topic sentence, and add one specific supporting detail. Avoid irrelevant or incorrect words (e.g., "write" and "fireworks"). Keep it natural and concise (1–3 sentences). Use a linking phrase if adding detail.

例: Yes, I did. My father taught me to ride a bicycle when I was in sixth grade, and I practiced with him every weekend until I felt confident.

提案: Start with a direct opinion, then give one or two clear, specific reasons using linking words (e.g., "because", "for example"). Correct vocabulary and grammar (e.g., "motorbikes" and "in recent years"). Keep it natural and under five sentences.

例: No, I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country because in recent years many teenagers prefer motorbikes for convenience and speed. For example, motorbikes are cheaper to buy second-hand and are faster for commuting.

× Yes I did. When I was a child I used to write a bike because my dad is teaching me when I was fireworks 6th grade.

✓ Yes, I did. When I was a child I used to ride a bike because my dad taught me when I was in sixth grade.

Problems identified: incorrect verb choice ('write' should be 'ride') and tense inconsistency ('is teaching' should be past tense 'taught'); missing preposition 'in' before 'sixth grade' and unclear phrase 'fireworks' which is irrelevant and likely a mistake. The sentence describes a past habitual action, so use 'used to ride' for habit and past simple 'taught' for the completed action. Also add commas for clarity and 'in sixth grade' for correct preposition use. Suggestion: use past simple for past events and 'ride' for bicycles; remove unrelated words like 'fireworks'.

× No I don't think so. Bikes are not popular in my country because recent years a lot of teenager boys and girls driving at surrounds like aftermath motorbikes.

✓ No, I don't think so. Bikes are not popular in my country because in recent years many teenage boys and girls have been riding around on motorbikes.

Problems: missing preposition 'in' before 'recent years' (preposition error), incorrect quantifier and adjective form ('a lot of teenager boys and girls' should be 'many teenage boys and girls'), incorrect verb tense/structure for recent continuous trend ('have been riding' fits ongoing recent activity), wrong verb 'driving at surrounds' and awkward noun 'aftermath' which is inappropriate here. Also plural/word choice: 'motorbikes' is fine but needs 'on' or 'riding'. Suggestions: use 'in recent years' for time phrases, 'many' with plural noun, 'teenage' as adjective, and present perfect continuous ('have been riding') to express a trend continuing to present; use 'riding around on motorbikes' for natural phrasing.