Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, tense consistency and naturalness. Use past tense for past situations, give a brief reason or extra detail (one or two short sentences) and keep it within 3–4 sentences. Use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect ideas.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because my family lived in a small apartment and we mostly walked. However, I sometimes borrowed my neighbour’s bike to ride in the park on weekends.

提案: Remove filler words (uh), make phrasing more natural and concise, and add a specific example or statistic. Use linking words like "because" or "as" and keep to 2–4 sentences max.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are convenient and can navigate heavy traffic more easily than cars. For example, many people in my city commute by bike to save time and money on fuel.

× No, I do not have a bike when I was a child.

✓ No, I did not have a bike when I was a child.

The sentence mixes present tense 'do not have' with the past time marker 'when I was a child'. This is a tense error. Use the simple past 'did not have' to match the past time reference. Suggestion: use consistent past tense for actions or states referring to the past (e.g., 'I did not have a bike').

× Uh, yes, I do think bikes are popular in my country, uh, because it's more convenient and it's easier to handle in traffic and it gives you a better mileage.

✓ Uh, yes, I do think bikes are popular in my country because they are more convenient, easier to handle in traffic, and give better mileage.

Multiple issues: pronoun/number and redundancy with contractions. 'It's' (it is) is singular and does not agree with the plural subject 'bikes'; use 'they are' or omit 'it is'. Also, 'it gives you a better mileage' is awkward: use 'give better mileage' without 'a' and without 'you' for general statements. Remove filler 'uh' and unnecessary repetition for clarity. Suggestion: ensure pronoun number matches noun and keep parallel structure in lists (e.g., 'are more convenient, easier to handle, and give better mileage').