Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be grammatically correct, concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence using past tense, then add one or two specific supporting details linked logically. Correct verb forms and articles matter (e.g., “I had a bike,” not “I have an class bike”). Avoid fillers like “uh” and unnecessary speculation phrases such as “you think.”

例: I had a small bicycle when I was a child. I rode it almost every day around my neighborhood, and on weekends I often went cycling with my friends to the nearby park.

提案: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence and then give specific reasons linked with connective words. Use correct subject-verb agreement and smoother linking phrases (for example, “because” followed by a complete clause or use “they are” instead of repeating fragments). Avoid filler sounds.

例: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country because they are inexpensive and easy to maintain. In addition, they are often faster than cars in crowded cities, and many people find them the most convenient option for short trips.

× Yes, I have an class bike.

✓ Yes, I had a small/one-class bike.

Article error (ID 22): 'an' before 'class' is incorrect because 'class' likely isn't the intended noun. Also tense should match question (past). Use 'had' not 'have'. If you mean a bike used for school ('a class bike'), use 'a' not 'an'. More likely you meant 'a small bike' or 'a one-seater bike'. Choose a specific noun and correct article: 'a' before consonant sound, 'an' before vowel sound. Ensure past tense 'had' to match 'Did you have...'. Suggested revision: 'Yes, I had a small bike.'

× I were playing with it.

✓ I was playing with it.

Subject-verb agreement / past tense error (ID 27 and 5): With singular first-person subject 'I' the past form is 'was', not 'were'. Use 'was' for 'I/he/she/it' in past continuous. Keep past continuous to describe an ongoing action in the past: 'I was playing with it.'

× Uh, for every day you think I go biking with my friends sometimes.

✓ I used to go biking with my friends every day, or sometimes we went biking together.

Sentence structure and tense errors (ID 26 and 6/5): The original mixes tense and word order ('for every day you think'). For habitual past actions, use 'I used to' or simple past 'I went'. Put time expressions ('every day' or 'sometimes') in natural positions: 'I used to go biking with my friends every day.' or 'Sometimes I went biking with my friends.' Choose one expression to avoid contradiction between 'every day' and 'sometimes.'

× Yes, bikes is a essential way of transporting my country.

✓ Yes, bikes are an essential means of transportation in my country.

Subject-verb agreement and article errors (IDs 27 and 22) and word choice: 'bikes' is plural so use 'are'. 'a essential' is incorrect: use 'an essential' because 'essential' begins with a vowel sound. Also 'way of transporting my country' is unnatural; use 'means of transportation in my country.'

× Uh, because it's a cheap way faster way and more accessible.

✓ They are cheap, faster, and more accessible.

Sentence structure and incorrect use of articles/adjectives (ID 26 and 13): The original repeats 'way' and mixes structures. For listing attributes use parallel structure and appropriate adjectives: 'cheap, faster, and more accessible.' If comparing to other transport, include 'than' (e.g., 'cheaper and more accessible than cars or buses'). Ensure subject 'they' (bikes) is used if continuing the previous sentence.