Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a direct short answer, then add one or two specific details using linking words. Avoid vague fillers and grammatical errors. For example, briefly state when you had the bike and describe one memory or how often you used it.

例: Yes, I did. I had a red bicycle from age seven to twelve, and I rode it to school almost every day. For instance, I remember practicing tricks with my friends in the park on weekends.

提案: Start with a clear opinion, then support it with specific reasons and examples using linking words (e.g., "because", "for example", "also"). Avoid fillers like "you know" and correct grammar (e.g., "when you walk"). Be concise and limit to 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in France because many people use them for daily commuting. For example, in Paris and other cities you often see bike lanes and public bike-sharing schemes. Also, cycling events and bicycle shops are common, which shows how widespread cycling is.

× ...like when you walking through the street normally you always see like witness some people with some bikes and there's also a lot of special.

✓ ...like when you walk through the street, you normally always see some people with bikes, and there are also a lot of bike lanes.

The original sentence uses 'when you walking' which is incorrect because after 'when' and a subject you need a base verb or appropriate tense. This is a verb + -ing form error (use of -ing where simple present is required). Also 'witness' is misused as a verb in this context and 'some bikes' is enough; 'there's also a lot of special' is incomplete and unclear. Suggest using 'when you walk' (simple present for habitual action), remove 'witness', simplify 'some people with bikes', and replace the incomplete phrase with a clear noun phrase like 'bike lanes'.