Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cần: 1) Trả lời trực tiếp, rõ ràng và có câu chủ đề; 2) Sử dụng ngữ pháp và từ vựng phù hợp (ví dụ: 'When I was a child I had a bicycle'); 3) Tránh lỗi phát âm và từ không đúng (ví dụ 'shot' -> 'short' không đúng ở đây; nhiều chỗ thiếu động từ hợp lệ); 4) Cấu trúc câu ngắn gọn (không quá 5 câu) và nếu thêm chi tiết thì dùng từ nối đơn giản như 'because' hoặc 'so'. Cụ thể: hãy nói bạn có/không có xe đạp, ai tặng/cho bạn mượn, và một kỷ niệm ngắn hoặc lý do tại sao bạn thích/nối).

例: Yes, I did. When I was a child my parents bought me a small red bicycle, and I used to ride it to the park every weekend because it was my favorite way to play with friends.

提案: Cần: 1) Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trả lời rõ ràng (Yes/No/Partly) và nhấn mạnh quan điểm; 2) Sử dụng thì đúng (ví dụ nói về 'in the past' dùng quá khứ đơn/hoàn thành), sắp xếp từ hợp lý (subject + verb + object); 3) Cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể và liên kết bằng từ nối như 'because', 'for example' hoặc 'nowadays'; 4) Tránh các cụm từ vụng về và lỗi ngữ pháp (ví dụ 'has was have' là sai).

例: Yes, bikes used to be very popular in Vietnam, especially during and after the war, because many people relied on them for both transportation and making a living; however, nowadays more people use motorbikes and cars.

× Uh, of course when I was shot, I I was not recite by from my parents.

✓ Uh, of course when I was a child, I was not given a bike by my parents.

The original sentence has multiple sentence structure problems: 'when I was shot' is incorrect and should be 'when I was a child' to fit the context; 'I I' is a repetition; 'was not recite by from my parents' is ungrammatical—likely intended meaning is 'was not given a bike by my parents'. This fixes word order and verb choice. Suggestion: keep subject-verb-object order and use 'give' with the correct passive form 'was given'.

× It's not like to hold by for teenager is like, hmm, it's like many children.

✓ It's not common for teenagers to have bikes; many children do, though.

The original sentence has unclear structure and incorrect idiomatic usage: 'not like to hold by for teenager' is ungrammatical. Use 'It's not common for teenagers to have bikes' to express rarity, and add 'many children do, though' for contrast. Suggestion: use the adjective 'common' with 'for + noun' and the infinitive 'to have'.

× Uh, in the past Vietnam, Vietnam War has was have a trend when with most people use by like not only, uh, transportation, but as a livelihood.

✓ In the past, during the Vietnam War, most people used bikes not only for transportation but also as a livelihood.

This sentence mixes tenses and contains incorrect verb forms and word order: 'Vietnam, Vietnam War has was have a trend when with' is gibberish. Use 'during the Vietnam War' to indicate time, and simple past 'used' for past habitual action. 'Not only... but also' is the correct correlative conjunction. Suggestion: place time expression first ('In the past, during the Vietnam War'), use past simple for repeated actions ('used'), and use the correct correlative pair 'not only... but also'.