Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Tu respuesta es clara y natural, pero puedes mejorar la estructura y la coherencia. Es recomendable abrir con una oración temática directa, evitar repeticiones (por ejemplo “around 6, from 6 to 8 or 9 years old” suena redundante) y usar conectores simples para enlazar ideas. Además, ajusta los tiempos verbales y corrige pequeños errores gramaticales (por ejemplo, ‘I enjoy it better’ → ‘I enjoyed it more’). Intenta mantener la respuesta dentro de 3–4 oraciones para mayor concisión.

例: No, I didn't have a bike as a child. Instead, I had a roller scooter from about age six to nine because it felt more comfortable and easier to balance. Because of that, I preferred the scooter for short rides around my neighborhood and rarely tried a bicycle.

提案: La respuesta aborda la pregunta pero es algo general y larga; mejora usando una oración principal clara seguida de razones concretas y un ejemplo. Usa conectores como 'because' o 'for example' y evita repeticiones ('play' y 'playing'). Añade una comparación más precisa y, si es posible, una consecuencia o predicción breve.

例: I think bicycles used to be more popular than they are now because more children stay at home using smartphones. For example, neighbourhood parks are quieter and fewer kids ride bikes to school, which suggests cycling has declined in popularity recently.

× I used to have a roller scooter because it was more comfortable for me and I enjoy it better than the bicycle.

✓ I used to have a roller scooter because it was more comfortable for me and I enjoyed it more than the bicycle.

The student mixes past habitual tense 'used to have' with present tense 'enjoy'. Both actions refer to the past (ages 6–8/9), so the verb should be in the past tense ('enjoyed') to maintain consistent time reference and correct sequence of tenses. Suggestion: keep verbs describing past experiences in the past form (used to / enjoyed).

× I think that a few years ago bicycles were more popular than now, and the reason is that children are more used to play and stay at home playing with phones instead of going outside.

✓ I think that a few years ago bicycles were more popular than they are now, and the reason is that children are more used to playing and staying at home with their phones instead of going outside.

Multiple tense and verb form issues: compare 'more popular than now' should be 'more popular than they are now' to include the comparison object and correct present tense. 'More used to play' is incorrect; after 'used to' in the sense of habit with 'more' one should use the gerund ('used to playing') or better 'are more used to playing'. Also 'stay at home playing with phones' needs parallel gerunds and a possessive for 'phones' ('with their phones'). Suggestion: use consistent tense and gerund forms for habitual activities (are more used to playing/staying).