Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and accurate with verb tenses and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and unnecessary phrases (e.g., “Sir,” repeated fillers). Correct tense usage (past for childhood, present for now) and clearer noun phrases (e.g., “a Royal Enfield motorcycle” if that is meant) will improve clarity and coherence.

例: Yes. I didn’t have a motorbike as a child, but I did have a bicycle that I often rode with friends in the park. Later, when I learned to ride and got my license, I bought a Royal Enfield, which I still prefer to ride today.

提案: Improve sentence grammar and use specific, coherent supporting details with linking words. Begin with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then give two specific reasons (cost and convenience) with brief examples. Replace unclear phrases (e.g., “loss of individual used bikes”) with precise expressions like “many people use bikes.” Use plural agreement and articles correctly.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. They are inexpensive and economical, so many people use them for daily travel. For example, people often ride bikes or scooters to work or to nearby shops because it saves time and fuel.

× Well, when I was young, Sir, I don't have a bike on that time.

✓ Well, when I was young, Sir, I didn't have a bike at that time.

The sentence mixes past context ('when I was young') with a present-tense verb 'don't have'. Use past simple 'didn't have' to match the past timeframe; also use the correct preposition 'at that time'. Suggestion: Use past simple for actions or states in the past and pair 'at' with 'that time'.

× I have a bicycle.

✓ I had a bicycle.

The speaker is referring to childhood (past), so tense should be past simple 'had' rather than present 'have'. This is primarily a tense issue but also a consistency with singular/plural: 'a bicycle' is singular and correct. Suggestion: Maintain past tense when describing past possessions.

× I like to ride bicycle with my friends in the my nearest park because I don't have a license at that time.

✓ I liked to ride a bicycle with my friends in the nearest park because I didn't have a license at that time.

Multiple issues: tense should be past ('liked', 'didn't have'), the count noun 'bicycle' needs the indefinite article 'a', and the phrase 'the my nearest park' incorrectly uses both 'the' and 'my'; choose 'the nearest park' or 'my nearest park'. Suggestion: Use 'a bicycle' and 'the nearest park' and match verbs to past context.

× But now, but nowadays I have license and I have one royal feed bike which I like from my childhood.

✓ But now, I have a license and I have a Royal Enfield bike which I have liked since my childhood.

Corrections: use 'a license' (article), brand likely 'Royal Enfield' and correct noun order; tense: present is appropriate for current possessions, but 'like from my childhood' is incorrect—use present perfect 'have liked since my childhood' to indicate a feeling that began in the past and continues. Suggestion: Use articles before singular count nouns and 'since' with a starting point when using present perfect.

× I and I always prefer to ride that bike.

✓ I always prefer to ride that bike.

Redundant pronoun 'I' appears twice. Use a single subject pronoun 'I'. Suggestion: Avoid repeating the subject; write 'I always prefer...'. Also 'prefer to ride' is fine in present context.

× So I would that have.

✓ So I would have that bike.

Word order is incorrect. If speaker means they would keep or choose that bike, 'I would have that bike' is clearer. However, in context of present preference, better: 'So I would keep that bike' or 'So I would choose that bike'. Suggestion: Arrange modals + subject + verb + object in correct order and choose a verb that conveys intended meaning.

× Yes, it is very common and very popular in my country because it is very cheap to buy and loss of individual used bikes for their daily routine.

✓ Yes, bikes are very common and popular in my country because they are cheap to buy and many individuals use bikes for their daily routine.

Original mixes singular 'it' with plural idea; 'bikes' should be plural and verbs adjusted to plural ('are'). 'loss of individual used bikes' is incorrect; intended meaning is 'many individuals use bikes'. Suggestion: Use plural subject 'bikes' with plural verbs and clear phrasing 'many individuals use bikes'.

× Like whenever they want to go to work they prefer to use bike and whenever they want to buy something from the nearest store they prefer to use bike or scooter.

✓ For example, whenever they want to go to work they prefer to use a bike, and whenever they want to buy something from the nearest store they prefer to use a bike or a scooter.

Needs articles 'a bike' and parallel structure. 'Like' at sentence start is informal; use 'For example'. Maintain plural/indefinite articles and parallel phrasing. Suggestion: Use 'a bike' or 'bikes' consistently and ensure parallel coordination with 'and'.