Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and correct grammar, avoid errors and redundancy, and add a brief specific detail with a linking word. Correct verb forms and word choice, and limit to 2–4 sentences. For example, mention how you used the bike and one memory or routine, using linking words like "so" or "and" to connect ideas.

例: Yes. I had a black bicycle that my uncle gave me when I was eight, and I was thrilled to receive it. I used to ride it around my neighborhood every afternoon, so I became very confident cycling on busy streets.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence and support it with one or two specific reasons or examples using linking words (e.g., "because", "for example"). Avoid one-word answers; expand to 2–3 sentences to show vocabulary and coherence.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them for short trips and exercise. For example, in cities there are dedicated bike lanes and many students cycle to school every day.

× Yes, I had a black bicycle that my uncle gave me when I was 8 year old.

✓ Yes, I had a black bicycle that my uncle gave me when I was 8 years old.

The phrase '8 year old' is singular adjective form used incorrectly; when indicating age with a number and noun, use the plural 'years' (8 years old). Use 'years' for any number other than one. Suggestion: write '8 years old' or 'when I was eight.'

× I was thrilled to get it and I used to write it around my neighborhood.

✓ I was thrilled to get it and I used to ride it around my neighborhood.

The verb 'write' is incorrect; the intended action with a bicycle is 'ride.' This is not an -ing form error per se but fits under verb choice; however the list includes 'Verb + -ing form' which covers incorrect verb forms and usage. Use 'ride' (base form after 'used to') to indicate habitual past action: 'used to ride.' Suggestion: replace 'write' with 'ride.'