Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant and gives specific details, but it has repetition and some minor grammar issues. To improve, start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, correct article and tense usage (e.g., “a small pink bicycle”), and keep the response concise (max 3–4 sentences). Use a linking phrase to add one supporting detail (e.g., why you liked it or a memory).

例: Yes. I had a small pink bicycle with training wheels when I was in elementary school. My parents bought it for me as a birthday present, and I loved riding it around the park every weekend.

提案: Your answer answers the question but is vague and contains hesitations and awkward phrasing. To improve, give a clear topic sentence, remove fillers (uh), and support your opinion with specific reasons or examples (e.g., bike lanes, leisure cycling, bike-sharing schemes). Use linking words (for example, because, also) to make your answer coherent and add one specific example to strengthen it.

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in Korea. For example, many cities have extensive bike lanes and public bike-sharing systems, so people often cycle for commuting and leisure. Also, there are cycling events and films that highlight bike culture, which shows how interested people are.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was in when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The sentence contains a repeated phrase 'when I was in when I was a child', which is a redundancy and disrupts past-tense clarity. Remove the repeated fragment to make a concise past-tense statement. Suggestion: say 'I had a bike when I was a child.'

× It was small pink bicycle with training wheels and my parents bought me when I was in elementary school.

✓ It was a small pink bicycle with training wheels, and my parents bought it for me when I was in elementary school.

The original sentence omits the indefinite article 'a' before 'small pink bicycle' and uses an incorrect object pronoun 'me' after 'bought'. Also lacks a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'and'. Correct use: 'a small pink bicycle' (article required for singular count noun) and 'bought it for me' or 'bought me a bike'; here 'bought it for me' keeps 'bicycle' as the object. Suggestion: include articles for singular count nouns and use appropriate pronoun or 'for' construction.

× Yes, bikes are very popular in my country, Korea, uh, for example, we have uh, movie about bikes.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country, Korea. For example, we have movies about bikes.

The phrase 'we have uh, movie about bikes' is incorrect: 'movie' should be plural 'movies' if speaking generally, and 'about' is correct but the sentence needs punctuation and removal of filler 'uh'. Also 'in my country, Korea' is acceptable but better separated with a period. Suggestion: use the plural form 'movies' for general statements and remove filler words.

× So our country's people are truly very interested in bike.

✓ So our people are truly very interested in bikes.

'Our country's people' is awkward; native phrasing is 'our people' or 'people in our country'. Also 'interested in bike' requires the plural or an article: use 'bikes' for general interest. Additionally, 'truly very' is redundant; one adverb is sufficient. Suggestion: say 'people in our country are very interested in bikes' or 'our people are very interested in bikes.'