Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is short, clear and directly answers the question, which is good. To improve, add one brief supporting detail (why you liked it or how often you used it) and use a linking word if you add a second idea. Keep it natural and limit to up to 3–4 short sentences. Also avoid repeating words like “child” unnecessarily.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used it almost every day to ride to my friend’s house and around the neighborhood, so it was an important part of my childhood.

提案: Your answer conveys the main idea but has grammar errors, awkward phrasing and redundancy. To improve: start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (e.g., "very popular" not "by a very popular"), avoid redundant words ("go where wherever they want"), and add one specific supporting detail (e.g., short distances, low cost, or traffic). Use a linking word like "because" to join reasons. Keep it concise (2–3 sentences).

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient for short trips. For example, many people use bikes to commute to work or school when traffic is heavy.

× Yes, I think by a very popular in our country 'cause it's very convenient for the peoples go to work and go where wherever they want.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are very popular in our country because they are very convenient for people to go to work and go wherever they want.

Errors: 'by a very popular' is ungrammatical and likely intended 'are very popular' (third person plural verb agreement and structure). 'peoples' is incorrect plural of 'people'. Missing 'to' before 'go to work' and extra word 'where' before 'wherever'. Use of 'cause' is informal; replace with 'because'. Improvements: Use correct subject-verb agreement ('bikes are'), use 'people' (not 'peoples'), include infinitive 'to' with 'go', remove redundant words, and use 'because' for formal speech.

× Yes, I think by a very popular in our country 'cause it's very convenient for the peoples go to work and go where wherever they want.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are very popular in our country because they are very convenient for people to go to work and go wherever they want.

Pronoun problems: 'it' was used to refer to 'bikes' but 'bikes' is plural, so use 'they' or repeat 'bikes'. Also 'peoples' is incorrect; the correct pronoun/noun is 'people'. Suggestion: Ensure pronoun number (singular/plural) matches the noun it replaces and use 'people' for plural human reference.

× Yes, I think by a very popular in our country 'cause it's very convenient for the peoples go to work and go where wherever they want.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are very popular in our country because they are very convenient for people to go to work and go wherever they want.

Prepositional errors: 'in our country' is fine, but 'for the peoples go to work' is missing the preposition 'to' before the verb 'go' and has an incorrect article. Use 'for people to go to work' to show purpose/infinitive. Also remove redundant 'where' before 'wherever'.

× Yes, I think by a very popular in our country 'cause it's very convenient for the peoples go to work and go where wherever they want.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are very popular in our country because they are very convenient for people to go to work and go wherever they want.

The sentence is unstructured and contains extra words and incorrect word order ('by a very popular'). Rearrangement fixes: state subject ('bikes'), verb ('are'), complement ('very popular'), reason clause introduced by 'because', and an infinitive phrase 'for people to go...'. This results in clear, grammatical English.

× Yes, I think by a very popular in our country 'cause it's very convenient for the peoples go to work and go where wherever they want.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are very popular in our country because they are very convenient for people to go to work and go wherever they want.

Conjunction issue: Using the informal contraction 'cause' (short for 'because') and the redundant 'and go where wherever' creates cohesion problems. Use the full conjunction 'because' and a single adverb 'wherever' to connect clauses properly.