Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve tense accuracy, conciseness and sentence structure. Start with a clear past-time topic sentence, use past tense consistently, avoid repetition, and add one specific supporting detail. Use a linking word to connect reasons.

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. I occasionally borrowed a friend's bike, but because I had several accidents, my parents were very protective and wouldn't allow me to own one. As a result, I missed out on cycling with friends and felt frustrated.

提案: Improve grammar, coherence and specificity. Keep answers within five sentences, correct subject-verb agreement, and use linking words. Provide a concise example with clear details (e.g., who uses bikes and for what trips).

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and handy for short journeys. For example, in Dhaka many people cycle to work or the market to avoid heavy traffic and save money. Moreover, in rural areas bicycles are common for going to school or nearby shops.

× No, I don't have a bike.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike.

The question asks about the past: 'Did you have a bike when you were a child?' The student's reply uses present tense 'don't have' which is inconsistent. Use past tense 'didn't have' to match the time frame in the question. Suggestion: match verb tense to the time reference in the question (use past simple for past situations).

× I occasionally borrowed a friend's bike, but because I had a history of accidents, my parents were overprotective and wouldn't let me own one, which was frustrating at the time.

✓ I occasionally borrowed a friend's bike, but because I had a history of accidents, my parents were overprotective and wouldn't let me have one, which was frustrating at the time.

The verb 'own' is grammatically correct but less natural after 'let me' in this context; 'let me have one' is more idiomatic. This is not a tense error but a word choice to fit the construction. Suggestion: use 'let me have' after 'wouldn't' for more natural phrasing.

× As example, I live in Dhaka.

✓ For example, I live in Dhaka.

The phrase 'As example' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'For example' to introduce an example. Also, the rest of the response should remain in present when describing current facts, so 'I live in Dhaka' is correct. Suggestion: use 'For example' to introduce illustrative information.

× This place is so overpopulated so people offers bike.

✓ This place is so overpopulated that people choose to use bikes.

There are multiple issues: 'people offers' is subject-verb disagreement ('people' is plural, so use plural verb 'offer' if that verb were appropriate). The original verb 'offers' is incorrect. Also 'bike' should be plural or a gerund phrase; the sentence is awkward. A clearer, grammatically correct version is 'people choose to use bikes.' Suggestion: ensure verb agrees with plural subject and use a clear verb and plural noun when speaking about people generally.