Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Clarify meaning, correct vocabulary and grammar, and make a concise structured response. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No), then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid hesitation and unnecessary words.

例: No, I didn't own a bike as a child. Instead, I rented a bicycle occasionally from a small shop near my home because I wasn't confident riding on my own. For example, my neighbour helped me practice once, but I still preferred walking or taking the bus.

提案: Remove fillers and improve sentence structure. Give a clear direct answer, then support it with specific reasons and an example or comparison. Use linking words (however, because, for example) to make your response coherent.

例: No, bicycles are not very popular in my country. Most people prefer cars because they are faster and more comfortable for long distances. However, in some cities you can see more cyclists for short trips, for example, students often ride bikes to university to avoid traffic.

× I did not have the worker when I was shy a child.

✓ I did not have a bike when I was a child.

The original sentence uses the wrong noun 'worker' and the adjective 'shy' incorrectly before 'a child'. The pronoun/noun choice is incorrect for the context; 'a bike' matches the examiner's question. Also 'shy a child' is ungrammatical word order. Suggestion: choose the correct noun and use the correct adjective order or omit unnecessary adjectives (e.g., 'when I was a child').

× I was renting some bikes from an old shop because I'm not an expert in riding a bike, especially without helpers.

✓ I used to rent bikes from an old shop because I wasn't an expert at riding a bike, especially without training wheels.

The phrase 'I was renting' is acceptable but 'used to rent' better expresses a past habitual action; this is a tense/style improvement. 'I'm not' should be past 'I wasn't' to match past context. 'In riding' is an incorrect preposition use; use 'at riding'. 'Helpers' is vague; 'training wheels' fits bicycle context. Suggestion: keep tense consistent for past habits and use correct prepositions and precise nouns.

× So the answer is no.

✓ So, the answer is no.

This sentence is acceptable but adding a comma improves clarity in spoken response. No major grammatical error; keep punctuation for clarity.

× Uh, from my own perspective, I don't see, uh, bikes are popular in my country.

✓ From my perspective, I don't think bikes are popular in my country.

The original mixes 'I don't see' with a clause 'bikes are popular', which is awkward. Replace with 'I don't think' to express opinion. Maintain present tense for general truths. Suggestion: use clear reporting verbs like 'think' or 'believe' when expressing opinions.

× Uh, the most popular, umm, object in my country at transportation is, uh, cars.

✓ The most popular means of transportation in my country is cars.

'Object... at transportation' is incorrect word choice and word order. Use the phrase 'means of transportation' to refer to transportation methods. 'Cars' is correct as the subject complement. Suggestion: learn common collocations like 'means of transportation'.

× Uh, I can see that uh, uh, in different cultures, uh, they prioritize bikes more than cars, but in my country, no, they.

✓ I can see that in some cultures people prioritize bikes more than cars, but in my country they do not.

The original has filler words and ends with an incomplete clause 'no, they.' This is a sentence structure and ellipsis error. Remove fillers, use 'people' as subject, and finish the contrast with 'they do not.' Suggestion: avoid filler sounds and complete your clauses when contrasting ideas.