Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Work on grammar, fluency and clarity. Use correct tense and subject-verb agreement, remove hesitations, and give a concise answer with one supporting detail. Structure your reply with a clear topic sentence followed by one specific detail. For example, say whether you had a bike, how old you were when you got it, and one memorable thing about riding it. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and avoid filler words like “uh.”

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I got it when I was seven and spent many afternoons riding in the park with my friends, which helped me become more confident and active.

提案: Improve sentence structure, coherence and provide a clear opinion with specific reasons or examples. Start with a direct opinion, then explain why using linking words (for example, because, mainly, however). Avoid hesitations and use correct pluralization and articles. Aim for 2–3 sentences with specific supporting details (e.g., traffic, weather, infrastructure).

例: I don't think bikes are very popular in my country because most people prefer cars for convenience and to handle long distances. For example, public roads and weather conditions make cycling less practical in many cities.

× I had a bike, uh, when I were, was a child, uh.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child.

The student mixed 'were' and 'was'. Use 'was' for the singular first-person past tense. Remove filler words and unnecessary commas for clarity. Suggestion: practice simple past forms of 'to be' (I was, you were, he/she was).

× I. Rides a bike.

✓ I ride a bike.

The student used the third-person singular verb form 'rides' with the first-person subject 'I'. For present simple with 'I', use the base form 'ride'. Also remove the fragmentary period. Suggestion: match subject and verb tense: 'I ride', 'He rides'."

× Uh, I think that. People who live in my country, uh, generally don't use bike, uh, they use car.

✓ I think that people who live in my country generally don't use bikes; they use cars.

Multiple issues: 'don't use bike' and 'use car' are countable nouns needing plural forms when speaking generally ('bikes', 'cars'). Also the sentence was run-on; join clauses properly with a semicolon or two sentences. Suggestion: use plural nouns for general statements and connect clauses correctly.