Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, correct the mistake (“bag” → “bike”), avoid unnecessary repetition, and add one or two specific supporting details using a linking word. Keep the answer to no more than 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I did. I had a small red bicycle when I was about eight years old, and I loved riding it with my grandparents. For example, we often cycled to the nearby market on weekends, which helped me become confident on the road.

提案: Reduce hesitation and make the response more fluent and structured. Begin with a direct answer, then give a specific reason and an example. Use linking words (for example, because, therefore) and avoid filler words. Be precise when describing Ubike’s features.

例: Yes, definitely. Bikes are very popular in Taiwan, mainly because of the public bike system called YouBike. For example, YouBike stations are widely available in Taipei, so people can rent a bike in one place and return it at another, which makes short trips very convenient.

× I had a bag when I was a child and I loved to ride bikes with my grandparents when I was living in the South Taiwan with them.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child and I loved to ride bikes with my grandparents when I lived in southern Taiwan with them.

The original sentence uses 'a bag' which is likely a typo for 'a bike' given context; this is a lexical error but treated here as singular/plural issue because 'bikes' vs 'a bike' inconsistency. Also 'the South Taiwan' is incorrect article and word order: use 'southern Taiwan' without 'the'. Replace 'was living' with 'lived' to match the past habitual action indicated by 'when I was a child'. Suggestion: use 'a bike' for singular possession and 'southern Taiwan' for the region; use simple past for past habitual actions.

× I think bikes are quite popular in Taiwan, especially, uh, public bikes called Ubike It is umm.

✓ I think bikes are quite popular in Taiwan, especially the public bikes called Ubike.

The original has awkward clause segmentation and repetition 'It is umm.' Remove the fragmented 'It is' and combine noun phrase: 'the public bikes called Ubike'. This corrects misuse of clauses and removes unnecessary filler. Suggestion: keep the noun phrase concise: 'especially the public bikes called Ubike.'

× It is a bike where you can ride it anywhere in the Taipei City and also you can return it anywhere if you see.

✓ They are bikes that you can rent and ride anywhere in Taipei City, and you can return them at any station you find.

Original uses singular 'It is a bike' for a system of public bikes and contains redundant pronoun 'ride it' and vague 'if you see'. Change to plural 'They are bikes' or 'the system' to reflect generality, use 'rent and ride' for clarity, remove redundant pronouns, and replace 'if you see' with 'at any station you find' to specify return locations. Suggestion: use clear relative clauses and plural agreement when describing a public bike system.