Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammatical accuracy, fix word choice errors, and make the answer more concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms (e.g., 'I often used it to explore'), possessives ('my friends'), and infinitive forms ('led me to travel' → better: 'allowed me to travel'). Keep the answer within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes. My parents bought me a small bike when I was six, and I used it to explore my neighborhood. For example, I would ride to the park and visit friends nearby, which made me feel independent. Because it was easy to use, I discovered many quiet streets and hidden places close to my home.

提案: Answer is generally clear and relevant but can be improved by adding a specific reason or example and using a linking phrase to expand coherently. Provide a brief comparison and one concrete example (e.g., public transport or traffic conditions). Keep to 2–3 sentences and use precise vocabulary like 'urban commuting' or 'long-distance travel'.

例: Not really. Cars and motorbikes are more common because people value their speed and convenience for urban commuting and long-distance travel. For instance, many commuters choose motorbikes to navigate heavy traffic in the city during rush hour.

× I often thought it to explore the neighborhood and meet their my friends.

✓ I often thought of it as a way to explore the neighborhood and meet my friends.

The original sentence misuses 'thought it to' and combines incorrect pronouns 'their my'. Use the pattern 'thought of it as' to express consideration, and correct pronoun to 'my friends'. Suggestion: use 'thought of it as' + noun phrase, and ensure pronouns match possession.

× Riding around made me feel carefree and independent because it led me travel easily and discover new places.

✓ Riding around made me feel carefree and independent because it led me to travel easily and discover new places.

The verb phrase 'led me travel' is missing the preposition 'to' before the bare infinitive; after 'lead someone to' use the base verb or 'to' + verb. Here 'led me to travel' is correct. Also gerund 'Riding' is fine. Suggestion: include 'to' after 'led me' when indicating the result or action.