Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct, use correct tense and fewer fillers, and organise your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by one or two specific supporting details. Correct grammar (past tense) and word choice (borrow/rent, not 'board' or 'recycle') will improve clarity. Keep to under five sentences and use linking words such as 'because' or 'however' correctly.

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. Bicycles were too expensive for my family, so we couldn't buy one. However, there was a park nearby where bikes could be rented, so I sometimes borrowed a bike to ride with my friends.

提案: Begin with a clear topic sentence and give specific reasons and examples. Fix grammar and plurals (bikes/places/mountains). Use linking words (because, so, therefore) correctly and avoid repetition. One or two concise supporting details (e.g., crowded streets, good public transport, popular hiking trails) will strengthen your answer.

例: No, bicycles are not very popular in Hong Kong. Because the city is densely populated with narrow streets and excellent public transport, many people prefer walking or taking the MTR. By contrast, hiking is popular because Hong Kong has many well-maintained trails and country parks, so people often go hiking at weekends.

× No, actually I don't.

✓ No, actually I didn't.

The examiner asked about the past (when you were a child), so the student should use past tense. 'Don't' is present tense; use 'didn't' for past negation.

× I didn't have a bike when I were a child.

✓ I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

The subject 'I' requires the past form 'was', not 'were'. Use 'was' for first-person singular in past tense.

× Like umm, a bike for me is expensive, However my family cannot afford that.

✓ Like, a bike was expensive for me; however, my family could not afford one.

Tense and modality should match past context. 'Is expensive' (present) conflicts with past timeframe; use 'was'. 'Cannot' (present) should be 'could not' for past ability. Use 'one' instead of 'that' for countable nouns. Also punctuation improved.

× Couldn't afford the bike umm.

✓ We couldn't afford a bike.

Sentence fragment lacks subject; add subject 'we'. Use past modal 'couldn't' for past inability and 'a bike' for an indefinite noun.

× But fortunately there is a park near my house and we can board a bike, therefore I still can recycle it with.

✓ But fortunately there was a park near my house where we could rent a bike, so I could still ride one.

Multiple issues: tense should be past ('was', 'could'), 'board a bike' is incorrect collocation — use 'rent' or 'borrow'; 'recycle it with' is incorrect — use 'ride one'. Also combine clauses with appropriate connectors ('so').

× No, bike are not popular in my country.

✓ No, bikes are not popular in my country.

Plural noun 'bikes' requires plural verb 'are'. The original used singular 'bike' with plural verb leading to agreement error.

× Actually, I am living in Hong Kong and Hong Kong is a small city.

✓ Actually, I live in Hong Kong, and Hong Kong is a small city.

For states or habitual facts, simple present 'I live' is preferred to present continuous 'I am living'. The second clause is correct as present simple.

× There are not enough place for people to cycle.

✓ There are not enough places for people to cycle.

'Place' should be plural 'places' after 'enough' and with 'are'. Use plural to match 'there are' and the meaning of multiple locations.

× However, hiking in Hong Kong is really really popular.

✓ However, hiking in Hong Kong is really popular.

The sentence is grammatical but contains redundancy ('really really'). Reduce repetition to a single 'really' for natural speech. Present participle 'hiking' is fine here.

× There are a lot of mountain in Hong Kong.

✓ There are a lot of mountains in Hong Kong.

Use plural 'mountains' to agree with 'a lot of' and the plural verb 'are'.

× Therefore people people hiking more than cycling.

✓ Therefore people hike more than they cycle.

Remove duplicate word 'people'. Use simple present 'hike' and 'cycle' for general habits, and add subject 'they' in the second clause for clarity.