Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clear, use correct grammar and concise sentences. Start with a direct topic sentence (past tense), then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct common errors (use past tense "didn't have" and "bike"). Avoid irrelevant fragments. Speak in up to five sentences and include specifics (who borrowed the bike, how often, and a brief feeling or result).

例: I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my family couldn't afford one. However, there was a park next to my house where my friends and I could borrow bikes. We usually borrowed them on weekends and cycled for an hour or two. It was a fun way to spend time outside and stay active.

提案: Answer directly and use comparisons correctly. Use plural/singular forms and accurate vocabulary (e.g., "places", "popular sport", "hiking"). Organize the answer: state your opinion, give reasons with linking words (because, therefore), and include a specific example or contrast. Keep it concise and avoid contradictory phrases like "no... like" without clarity.

例: I don't think bikes are very popular in my country because our cities are crowded and lack safe cycling routes. By contrast, in Hong Kong or mountainous areas people prefer hiking, since there are many trails. For example, weekend hikers often go to nearby hills rather than cycle in traffic.

× Umm, actually when I was a child I don't have bite because it is so expensive for me and my family cannot afford that.

✓ Umm, actually when I was a child I didn't have a bike because it was too expensive for me and my family couldn't afford one.

The sentence mixes past context with a present-tense verb 'don't have'. Use past tense 'didn't have' to match 'when I was a child'. 'Bite' is a spelling error; correct to 'bike'. Also use past tense 'was' for cost and contracted 'couldn't' for ability in the past. Replace 'that' with 'one' as a pronoun referring to 'a bike'. Suggested improvement: Pay attention to time markers (when I was a child) and keep verbs in the past; check spelling of nouns (bike).

× However, there is a park next to my house and there am there.

✓ However, there was a park next to my house and I was there.

The student uses present 'is' and awkward word order 'there am there' in a past context. Change 'is' to past 'was' to match the childhood timeframe and reorder to 'I was there'. Suggested improvement: Match verb tense to the time reference and use subject + verb order (I was there).

× We can borrow a bike here and cycling.

✓ We could borrow a bike there and cycle.

In this context of past ability, 'can' should be 'could' and verbs coordinated by 'and' should share the same form: use base form 'cycle' after 'could/ can'. 'Cycling' is a gerund and does not parallel 'borrow' here. Also change 'here' to 'there' to match 'next to my house' (away from the examiner). Suggested improvement: Use parallel verb forms and match modal tense to past (could + base verb).

× No, I think bike is not popular in my country like in Hong Kong.

✓ No, I think bikes are not as popular in my country as in Hong Kong.

Use plural 'bikes' when speaking generally about the type of vehicle. Also use the comparative structure 'not as popular ... as' to compare two places. Suggested improvement: Use plural nouns for general statements and correct comparative patterns ('not as ... as').

× Hong Kong is very a small country and there are not many place that people can cycle there.

✓ Hong Kong is a very small place and there are not many places where people can cycle.

Word order 'very a small' is incorrect; use 'a very small'. 'Country' is awkward for Hong Kong; 'place' or 'city' is better. 'Place' must be plural 'places' after 'many'. Use 'where' instead of 'that ... there' to introduce a relative clause about locations. Remove redundant 'there'. Suggested improvement: Learn correct article placement ('a very small') and use 'places where' for locations; ensure noun number matches quantifier ('many places').

× And however hiding in Hong Kong is the most popular sport.

✓ However, hiking is the most popular sport in Hong Kong.

The sentence uses 'hiding' instead of 'hiking' (spelling) and wrong word order 'And however'. Start with 'However,' or 'And' not both; 'However' alone is enough. Place 'in Hong Kong' at the end for natural word order. Use 'hiking' (activity) and correct spelling. Suggested improvement: Check word choice and spelling; avoid stacking conjunctions ('And however'); place location phrases naturally at the end.

× There are lots of mountain.

✓ There are lots of mountains.

'Lots of' requires a plural noun: use 'mountains' not singular 'mountain'. Suggested improvement: When using quantifiers like 'lots of', ensure the noun is plural.