Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Correct the tense and grammar, give a direct topic sentence then add one brief supporting detail using a linking word. Be natural and concise (no more than 5 sentences). For example, start with 'No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child.' then add a reason or brief context such as where you lived or how you travelled.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. I grew up in a small apartment city where bikes were impractical, so I usually walked or used public transport instead.

提案: Finish the sentence with a clear reason and add a supporting detail using a linking word. Use specific information and varied vocabulary (e.g., 'popular' vs 'important'). Keep it natural and concise. For example, say whether they are popular and why, then give one specific example or consequence.

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because they are an affordable and convenient way to get around; for instance, many students and workers cycle short distances to avoid traffic and save money.

× No, I don't have any bike when I was kid.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

This sentence mixes present tense auxiliary 'don't have' with past time expression 'when I was a child.' Use simple past 'didn't have' for past situations. Also use the singular form 'a bike' with the negative past ('didn't have') and the correct noun phrase 'a child.' Suggestion: Use 'didn't' + base verb for past negatives and include appropriate articles: 'No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child.'

× I think bikes are very important in my country because it.

✓ I think bikes are very important in my country because they are useful and affordable.

The original sentence ends with the word 'it,' which creates an incomplete and unclear clause. The demonstrative pronoun 'they' should refer to 'bikes' (plural). Also provide a reason after 'because' to complete the sentence. Suggestion: Use a plural pronoun 'they' to match 'bikes' and finish the clause with a clear reason, e.g. 'because they are useful and affordable.'