Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, sentence structure and add a brief supporting detail. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then add one or two specific details using linking words. Keep it natural and concise (no more than 3–4 short sentences).

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small blue bicycle with training wheels, and I rode it around my neighborhood every afternoon. Because of that, I learned balance and gained confidence early on.

提案: Work on clarity and correctness: state your opinion clearly, give specific reasons and use linking words to connect ideas. Use correct grammar and natural phrasing; avoid vague phrases like “every need that bike.” Keep to 2–3 sentences max.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. In particular, many people use them for short commutes and running errands because they are cheap and convenient. Additionally, cycling is common in cities where traffic is heavy, so bikes are often faster than cars for short trips.

× Yes, I have bike in my childhood.

✓ Yes, I had a bike in my childhood.

This sentence contains two issues from the provided list: a Present tense issue (6) because the student used present tense 'have' while referring to a past time 'in my childhood', and an Article error (22) because the singular countable noun 'bike' needs the indefinite article 'a'. Correct use: 'had' (simple past) matches the past time reference, and 'a' precedes the singular noun. Suggestion: Use past tense for past time expressions and include appropriate articles before singular countable nouns, e.g., 'I had a bike when I was a child.'

× Yes, bikes are popular in my country because every need that bike.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country because everyone needs a bike.

This sentence has incorrect use of pronouns/quantifiers (14) and sentence structure errors (26). 'Every need that bike' is ungrammatical. The intended meaning is likely that everyone needs a bike, so use the pronoun 'everyone' and the present tense verb 'needs' for general truth; include the article 'a' before 'bike'. Suggestion: Rephrase unclear phrases into standard subject-verb-object order and use appropriate pronouns/quantifiers, e.g., 'everyone needs a bike.'