Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more grammatically accurate, concise, and add a clear topic sentence plus one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words (for example, because/so) and correct tense and vocabulary (e.g., 'I had a bike' instead of 'I have a bike'). Avoid repetition and limit response to 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes — I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small red bicycle with training wheels, and I used it to visit my friends and go to the park. Because I practised riding it every day, it helped me improve my balance and confidence.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence, use plural and articles correctly (e.g., 'Bikes are popular'), and provide one or two specific reasons with linking words (for example, because/so/also). Replace vague phrases with precise language and correct collocations (e.g., 'environmentally friendly' and 'good exercise for your legs'). Keep to 2–4 sentences.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient for short trips. For example, many people cycle to work or the market, and riding regularly is also good exercise for the legs and helps reduce pollution.

× Definitely. I have a bike when I was a kid that's really interesting to have a bike.

✓ Definitely. I had a bike when I was a kid; it was really interesting to have one.

The student mixes present tense 'have' with past time marker 'when I was a kid'. Use past tense 'had' to match the past time. Also replace the repeated noun with the pronoun 'one' for naturalness and connect independent clauses with a semicolon or period.

× I can take bike to anywhere which I want to go.

✓ I could take my bike anywhere I wanted to go.

The sentence lacks the definite/possessive article for 'bike' and uses present tense 'can' with past context; use 'my bike' and past/modal 'could' or match past narrative. Also 'to anywhere' is incorrect; use 'anywhere' and omit the relative clause 'which I want to go' in favor of 'I wanted to go'.

× That's really interesting and unbelievable.

✓ That was really interesting and unbelievable.

Maintain past tense 'was' to match earlier past narrative. 'Interesting' and 'unbelievable' are adjectives describing the past experience, so use past form of the copular verb.

× It can help me exercise my balance feelings.

✓ It helped me practice my balance.

'Can' should be past 'helped' to match past context. 'Exercise my balance feelings' is unidiomatic; use 'practice my balance' or 'improve my balance'. Avoid 'feelings' after 'balance'.

× Yes, bike is a really popular transportation in my country.

✓ Yes, bikes are a very popular means of transportation in my country.

Use plural 'bikes' and plural verb 'are' for general statements. Also 'transportation' typically requires an article or 'means of transportation' is more natural.

× If you have bike you can go somewhere that not really far and not really close and it's really environmental friendly and it can also to exercise your feet.

✓ If you have a bike, you can go to places that are not very far and not very close; it's very environmentally friendly, and it can also help exercise your legs and feet.

Insert the article 'a' before 'bike'. Add commas for clarity. Use 'places' instead of 'somewhere' and correct the clause 'that are not very far and not very close'. 'Environmental friendly' should be 'environmentally friendly' (adverb + adjective). Remove the extra infinitive 'to' after 'also' and use 'help exercise' plus more natural 'legs and feet' or simply 'legs'.