Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Chỉnh ngữ pháp và dùng thì phù hợp; tránh lặp từ và làm câu ngắn, tự nhiên hơn. Cụ thể: (1) Sửa lỗi chủ-động từ (were → was) khi nói về bản thân trong quá khứ. (2) Dùng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó thêm 1–2 chi tiết hỗ trợ bằng các liên từ như "when" hoặc "so". (3) Tránh lặp từ "bike" quá nhiều bằng cách thay bằng đại từ hoặc từ đồng nghĩa khi cần.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, especially during primary school. I used it to ride to school every day, which was a quick and enjoyable way to get there.

提案: Cải thiện ngữ pháp, trật tự từ và dùng liên từ để làm rõ ý so sánh. Cụ thể: (1) Bỏ các từ thừa và sửa thì/động từ (ví dụ "around 10 years ago" + past tense). (2) Dùng cấu trúc so sánh chính xác (more popular than). (3) Nên thêm lý do cụ thể (ví dụ: tốc độ, tiện lợi, địa hình) để làm câu chi tiết hơn và thuyết phục.

例: About ten years ago bicycles were quite popular in my country, but nowadays motorbikes are more common than bikes because they are faster and more convenient for long distances.

× Yes, I had a bike when I were a child, especially when I were in primary school.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, especially when I was in primary school.

'Were' is plural past tense and is incorrect with singular subject 'I' in standard English in affirmative past tense. Use 'was' for first-person singular past. Suggestion: use 'was' after subjects I/he/she/it in past simple statements.

× I used a bike to travel to school every day.

✓ I used my bike to travel to school every day.

The sentence uses past tense correctly but sounds more natural and specific with a possessive determiner 'my' before 'bike'. Suggestion: include 'my' to clarify ownership and natural usage.

× I things around 10 years ago is were really popular in my country, but nowadays I think the motorbike is a more popular compared to a bike in my country.

✓ I think that around 10 years ago bikes were really popular in my country, but nowadays I think motorbikes are more popular than bicycles.

Original sentence has multiple structural problems: 'I things' is ungrammatical; tense and agreement errors with 'is were'; wrong comparative phrasing 'is a more popular compared to a bike'. Corrections: reorder to 'I think that' + clear time reference; use plural 'bikes were' for general statement in past; use present plural 'motorbikes are' for current general truth; use comparative 'more popular than' and consistent nouns ('bicycles' or 'bikes'). Suggestion: break complex ideas into clear clauses and ensure subject-verb agreement and correct comparative pattern 'more X than Y'.

× People like to travel in a motorbike more than travel by bike.

✓ People prefer to travel by motorbike rather than by bike.

Use of prepositions for modes of transport: 'by' is standard (by motorbike, by bike). 'In a motorbike' is incorrect because 'in' suggests being inside something; we say 'on a motorbike' or 'by motorbike'. Also parallel structure improves clarity: 'prefer to X rather than to Y' or 'prefer to X rather than Y'. Suggestion: use 'by motorbike' or 'on a motorbike' and maintain parallel construction.