Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, sentence structure and add a little detail. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct articles and infinitive forms, and add one supporting detail using a linking word. Keep it natural and under five sentences.

例: Yes, I did. When I was young my mother bought me a bike so I could cycle to school. It was a small blue bicycle with a basket, and I remember feeling very proud whenever I rode it to class.

提案: Make the opinion clear and fix grammar and word choice. Begin with a direct statement, then give a specific reason using a linking phrase (e.g., "because", "however"). Avoid repetition and ensure subject-verb agreement and correct plural forms.

例: To be honest, bikes are not very popular in my country. This is because public transport like metros and buses, as well as private cars, are more convenient for most people, so fewer people choose to cycle now.

× Yes, when I was young my mother bought me a bike to let me go school.

✓ Yes, when I was young my mother bought me a bike to let me go to school.

The sentence is missing the preposition 'to' before 'school'. After verbs like 'go', the noun for places often requires the preposition 'to' (go to school). Suggestion: include the correct preposition 'to' when expressing movement toward a place: 'go to school'. The rest of the sentence is grammatically acceptable for the past context.

× To be honest, I think there are many. Transport more crucial than bikes in my country.

✓ To be honest, I think bikes are not very popular; transport is more crucial than bikes in my country.

The original contains a fragment 'I think there are many.' which is vague and a fragment 'Transport more crucial than bikes' missing a verb. This is a sentence structure error. Correction adds a clear subject and verb and links the ideas: 'I think bikes are not very popular; transport is more crucial than bikes.' Suggestion: ensure each clause has a clear subject and verb and combine related ideas for clarity.

× My country has many metros, buses and cars, so less people use bikes in my countries now.

✓ My country has many metros, buses, and cars, so fewer people use bikes in my country now.

Two issues: 'less' vs 'fewer' — 'fewer' is used with countable nouns like 'people' (grammar problem type 14 but here mapped to pronoun/quantifier mix). Also 'my countries' is incorrect plural; should be singular 'my country'. The sentence also needed a comma in the list. Suggestion: use 'fewer' with countable nouns and keep the correct singular form 'my country'.