Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise, correct grammar, and organize your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition and fix tense/word order problems. Use linking words like "so" or "therefore" correctly to connect ideas. Try to include a brief reason and a short example if needed.

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my family couldn't afford one. Therefore, I walked to school every day, although sometimes my brother would give me a lift on his motorbike.

提案: Start with a clear direct answer, then give one or two specific supporting points with correct vocabulary and grammar. Use linking words (e.g., "however", "whereas") to show contrast between small towns and big cities. Avoid filler sounds and incorrect word forms (e.g., "town", "ride" → "rides" when subject requires).

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in small towns because they are cheap and convenient. However, in big cities many people prefer motorcycles or cars due to longer distances and traffic.

× No, I didn't have a bike when when I was a child because my family couldn't afford to buy a bike for me every day I so every day I walk to school and sometime my brother sent to me by motorbike.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my family couldn't afford to buy one for me, so I walked to school every day and sometimes my brother sent me by motorbike.

Errors: repeated word 'when when'; inconsistent tense (used past 'didn't have' and present 'walk'); awkward phrasing 'buy a bike for me every day' and 'sent to me'. Corrections: remove duplicate 'when', change 'every day I walk' to past 'I walked to school every day' to match past time frame, replace 'buy a bike for me every day' with 'afford to buy one for me', replace 'sometime' with 'sometimes', and change 'sent to me by motorbike' to 'sent me by motorbike' for correct object pronoun placement. Suggestion: maintain past tense throughout the sentence when referring to childhood events and use concise pronouns (one, me) and correct adverbs (sometimes).

× Uh yeah, in a small tower everyone ride a bike and to travel or to go somewhere, but and in a big tower we uh, we didn't take motorbike or we to have to take a bike.

✓ Uh yeah, in a small town everyone rides a bike to travel or go somewhere, but in a big town we didn't take motorbikes and had to take a bus or use other transport.

Errors: 'tower' should be 'town' (word choice) and 'everyone ride' is singular/plural agreement—'everyone' takes third-person singular verb 'rides' (subject-verb agreement). 'Motorbike' singular/plural inconsistency; use plural 'motorbikes' when speaking generally. The original also mixes tenses and has ungrammatical phrases 'we didn't take motorbike or we to have to take a bike.' Corrections: change 'everyone ride' to 'everyone rides', 'tower' to 'town', change to past tense 'we didn't take motorbikes' and provide a coherent alternative 'had to take a bus or use other transport.' Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement for 'everyone' and keep consistent number (singular/plural) when speaking generally; maintain consistent past tense when referring to general past habits.