Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and clear: start with a topic sentence answering the question, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (past tense) and avoid filler sounds. For example, say whether you owned a bike or shared one, who you rode with, and a short reason or memory. Keep it under five sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. I usually shared it with my close friends and we rode around our neighborhood after school. Because there were few cars in our area, it felt safe and fun to explore together.

提案: Answer directly, then give two clear reasons with linking words (for example, 'because' and 'also'). Use correct grammar and concise vocabulary; avoid repeating words. Mention weather, infrastructure, or culture specifically. Keep to a maximum of five sentences.

例: No, I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country. This is mainly because summers are extremely hot, which makes cycling uncomfortable. Also, many cities lack safe bike lanes, and culturally people prefer cars for convenience.

× Actually, when I child uh, I apply bike with my, uh, close friends, uh and uh. So getting.

✓ Actually, when I was a child, I rode a bike with my close friends.

This sentence has multiple issues: missing auxiliary verb 'was' (therefore past tense and subject-verb structure), incorrect verb 'apply' instead of 'ride', unnecessary filler words, and fragmented structure. This fits 'Sentence structure errors' (ID 26) and also involves past tense (ID 5) and word choice. Correction uses 'was' for past reference and 'rode' as the correct past tense of 'ride'. Suggestion: remove fillers like 'uh', use simple past for completed past actions, and choose the correct verb ('ride a bike').

× Actually it's not, uh, popular in my country because my country is, uh, because the weather in my country very hot in the summer and uh, the way at the winter, uh, my culture, uh, it's not, uh, encouraged, uh, bike.

✓ Actually, bikes are not very popular in my country because the weather is very hot in the summer, and in winter the culture does not encourage cycling.

Original sentence shows incorrect verb forms and agreement (missing 'are' for plural 'bikes', missing 'is' after 'weather', and awkward expressions). This fits 'Present tense issue' (ID 6) and 'Subject-verb agreement' (ID 27) and 'Incorrect use of prepositions' (ID 11). Correction uses present simple ('are', 'is', 'does not encourage') and clearer phrases ('in winter', 'encourage cycling'). Suggestion: use correct present-tense verbs to match subjects, include necessary linking verbs, and replace 'encouraged bike' with 'encourage cycling' or 'encourage riding bikes'.