Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific supporting details linked logically. Use correct tense (simple past) and avoid repetition. Add linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect ideas and provide a brief example to make the answer more natural and informative.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I begged my parents to buy one because all my friends had bikes and I wanted to ride with them. It was very useful for short trips, such as cycling to school and going to the local shops, so I used it almost every day.

提案: Give a clear direct opinion, then support it with 1–2 specific reasons and a brief example. Use precise vocabulary (e.g. 'electric vehicles', 'urban areas') and correct grammar. Use linking phrases such as 'because', 'for example', or 'however' to make your answer coherent.

例: I don't think bikes are very popular in my country. This is mainly because many people prefer cars and electric vehicles for convenience, especially in cities. For example, public investment in electric scooters and cars has increased, so fewer people choose cycling for daily travel.

× Yes, of course I have a bike when I would start because I forced my parents for buying me a bike because I really like that and all of my friends have already bike.

✓ Yes, of course I had a bike when I was young because I persuaded my parents to buy one for me; I really liked it and all of my friends already had bikes.

The student mixes present tense with past events. Use past tense for childhood actions: 'had' instead of 'have', 'was' instead of 'would start', 'persuaded' (past) instead of 'forced' for a more natural meaning, and 'to buy' instead of 'for buying'. Also correct plural and article: 'all of my friends already had bikes' (plural noun and past tense). Improve sentence flow by splitting clauses with punctuation.

× It helps me in many ways at the time, going to school and going to groceries and that's all.

✓ It helped me in many ways at that time, such as going to school and going to the grocery store.

This sentence should be in past tense to match 'had a bike': use 'helped' not 'helps'. 'At the time' should be 'at that time' for clarity. 'Going to groceries' is incorrect; use 'going to the grocery store' (singular, count noun with article) or 'going grocery shopping'. Also avoid 'and that's all' which is informal and vague.

× Well, in my opinion, I don't think that bikes are very popular in my country because nowadays everything is under electronic activities.

✓ Well, in my opinion, I don't think that bicycles are very popular in my country because nowadays many activities use electronic technology.

The phrase 'everything is under electronic activities' is ungrammatical and unclear. Use 'many activities use electronic technology' to express the idea. 'Bikes' can be more formally 'bicycles'. Tense is present and appropriate, but wording needed correction for clarity and grammar.

× And yeah, electronic cars, vehicles are really popular in my country.

✓ Electric cars and other vehicles are really popular in my country.

'Electronic cars' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'electric' for cars. Also 'electronic cars, vehicles' is awkward; better 'electric cars and other vehicles'. Keep 'really popular' which is acceptable.

× Not by because everyone has bike nowadays.

✓ Not because everyone has a bike nowadays.

The original has extra filler 'by' and missing article 'a' before 'bike'. Remove 'by' and add 'a' to form the correct clause 'Not because everyone has a bike nowadays.'

× So yeah, it is not quite popular.

✓ So yes, it is not very popular.

'So yeah' is informal; 'So yes' is clearer. 'Not quite popular' is understandable but 'not very popular' is more natural. Present tense 'is' is correct here to describe the current situation.