Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, verb tense and sentence clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence using past tense, then add one or two concise supporting details. Use correct word order and prepositions (e.g., "I had a bike"; "around my hometown" or "in the countryside"). Keep to under five sentences and avoid repetition.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used to ride it around my hometown and the nearby countryside. Riding made me feel independent and it was a great way to visit friends and explore the area.

提案: The answer does not address the question about popularity. First answer directly (e.g., "Yes, bikes are popular because..."). Then provide 1–2 specific supporting reasons using linking words (e.g., "because", "for example"). Avoid repeating phrases and keep past and present tenses consistent.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them for short trips and exercise. For example, students and shopkeepers often cycle to school or work, and there are several bike lanes in smaller towns that encourage cycling.

× When I was a child, I have a bike I traveling around my country's ha country side, my hometown.

✓ When I was a child, I had a bike and I traveled around my country's countryside, near my hometown.

Errors: incorrect present tense 'have' used in a past-time clause (should be past tense 'had'); missing conjunction and wrong verb form 'I traveling' (should be 'I traveled'); typographical repetition 'ha country side' and word order issues. Suggestion: use past tense consistently for past-time narratives, include conjunctions for clarity ('and'), and use the simple past form of the verb ('traveled'). Also correct spelling and word order ('countryside, near my hometown').

× When I was a child, I had a bike and I used to ride it around the countryside near my hometown. I loved exploring the nearby fields and visiting friends because it made me made me feel free and independent.

✓ When I was a child, I had a bike and I used to ride it around the countryside near my hometown. I loved exploring the nearby fields and visiting friends because it made me feel free and independent.

Error: repetition 'made me made me' is a typographical/redundant phrase causing sentence structure problems. Suggestion: remove the duplicate 'made me' to keep the past tense narrative consistent and fluent: 'it made me feel free and independent.'