Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Grammar and naturalness: Correct the tense and article use. Give a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details. Keep it concise (max 5 sentences) and use linking words if adding details. For example, use past simple: “I had a bike when I was a child.” Then add a short detail: why you liked it or how you used it.

例: I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small red bicycle with a bell, and I used it to ride to my friend’s house every afternoon. Because it was easy to handle, I learned to ride fast and felt very independent.

提案: Make the response more natural and specific. Start with a clear topic sentence in present tense, then contrast past and present using linking words (however, but, although). Add a specific reason or example to support your opinion.

例: Bikes used to be very popular in my country, but they are less common now. For example, many people now prefer motorbikes or cars because city roads have gotten busier and public transport has improved, so fewer people cycle for daily travel.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The sentence mixes present tense 'have' with a past time reference 'when I was child'. Use simple past 'had' to match the past context. Also add the article 'a' before 'child' to form 'a child'. Suggestion: use 'I had' for past possession and include 'a' before 'child'.

× Yes, for some time it was very popular in my country, but right now maybe not very popular.

✓ Yes, for some time it was very popular in my country, but right now it may not be very popular.

The phrase 'maybe not very popular' is informal and lacks a clear subject and modal verb consistency. Replace 'maybe' with the modal 'may' and include the subject 'it' to form a proper clause 'it may not be very popular', which fits the present evaluation. Suggestion: use modal verb 'may' + base verb to express current possibility and keep the subject 'it'.