Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is direct but brief and has a small grammatical error. Improve by adding a clear topic sentence, correcting the verb structure, and providing one specific supporting detail. Keep it natural and within 3–4 sentences. For example, use “bought me one” and mention when or where you rode it.

例: Yes, I did. My dad bought me one when I was about eight so I could ride to school every day. I really enjoyed the freedom it gave me and often rode with friends on the route home.

提案: Your response answers the question and gives a reason, but it is slightly disfluent and has minor grammar and coherence issues. Remove filler words, combine sentences with linking words, and give a brief specific example or comparison to strengthen your answer. Keep to 2–4 sentences.

例: Not really. Because the weather is usually very hot, many people prefer scooters or motorcycles instead of biking. For example, during the long summer months most commuters choose air-conditioned buses or motorbikes because cycling in the heat is uncomfortable.

× Yes I did, my dad bought me to ride to school.

✓ Yes I did. My dad bought me a bike to ride to school.

The original sentence omits the object 'a bike' after 'bought me' and uses a comma splice between independent clauses. Add the noun 'a bike' as the direct object and separate into two sentences or use a conjunction. Also ensure 'bought me a bike' uses the correct past tense and past participle is not required here; the main issue is missing object and sentence structure.

× I don't think so. In my country the weather is really hot, so you uh, people don't like to bike under the sun.

✓ I don't think so. In my country the weather is really hot, so people don't like to ride bikes in the sun.

The phrase 'you uh, people' is informal and confusing; replace with 'people'. 'Bike' as a verb is acceptable but 'ride bikes' is more natural. Use the preposition 'in' the sun rather than 'under' the sun. Maintain simple present tense for habitual actions.

× They prefer to use a scooter or motorcycles.

✓ They prefer to use scooters or motorcycles.

The original mixes singular 'a scooter' with plural 'motorcycles', creating inconsistency. Use parallel plural nouns 'scooters or motorcycles' (or 'a scooter or a motorcycle') to keep grammatical agreement and parallel structure.