Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng hơn, ngắn gọn, ngữ pháp đúng và có mạch lạc. Hiện tại câu có lỗi thì thì (sử dụng thì quá khứ), từ vựng không chính xác (“that is the first bike that I have” nên là “which was my first bike”), và câu hơi dài/không đủ chi tiết hỗ trợ. Hãy bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề trực tiếp, rồi thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết hỗ trợ (ví dụ: mô tả màu sắc, cảm giác khi nhận, hoặc kỷ niệm liên quan). Sử dụng liên từ đơn giản nếu cần (for example, because).

例: Yes. When I was ten, my father bought me my first bike, a red mountain bike. I remember being very excited because I could finally ride to my friend’s house by myself. It helped me feel more independent and active.

提案: Câu trả lời thiếu rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi phát âm/chọn từ (ví dụ “back” thay vì “bike”, “transport station” không phù hợp). Câu cần cấu trúc tốt hơn: mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề, cung cấp 1–2 lý do cụ thể với liên từ (because, for example) và tránh tiếng “uh”. Nên đưa ví dụ cụ thể (thành phố hay vùng nông thôn), hoặc lợi ích cụ thể (tiết kiệm tiền, tốt cho sức khỏe).

例: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient. For example, many people use bikes to commute to work in small cities, and regular cycling also improves cardiovascular health and saves money on fuel.

× When I was 10 years old, my dad bought me a bike that is the first bike that I have.

✓ When I was 10 years old, my dad bought me a bike; it was the first bike I ever had.

The original mixes past and present tense ('bought' past, 'is' and 'have' present). Use consistent past tense for past events: 'was' and 'had'. Also simplify phrasing ('the first bike I ever had'). Suggestion: keep past tense verbs when describing past experiences and avoid unnecessary present-tense verbs in the same sentence.

× Yes, I think back is the common transport station uh, you can go anywhere with the bike uh, and if it help improve your health.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are a common means of transport; you can go anywhere by bike, and they can help improve your health.

Multiple issues: 'back' is a misspelling of 'bike'; noun form and article are incorrect ('the common transport station' is wrong). Pronouns and subject agreement: use plural 'bikes' and plural pronoun 'they' to refer to bikes. Modal verb and verb form: 'if it help' is incorrect; use 'they can help' to state a general ability. Suggestions: use correct noun forms ('bikes'), ensure subject-pronoun agreement ('they' for plural), choose appropriate expressions ('means of transport' or 'mode of transport'), and use modal verbs correctly ('can help').