Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a direct, past-tense topic sentence and add one or two specific supporting details. Use past tense consistently, avoid vague phrases like “home zone,” and keep it within 3–4 sentences. Add a linking word when giving details (for example, “and” or “so”).

例: Yes, I did — I had a small red bicycle when I was about eight. I often rode it with my friends around my neighbourhood, and we would race to the park every afternoon. Those rides helped me become more confident on the road.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence and then give two specific reasons using linking words (for example, “because” and “for example”). Be concise: avoid repetition (“I think” twice) and replace vague words with precise descriptions (e.g., “urban areas,” “commuters,” “exercise”).

例: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country because many people use them for short journeys and exercise. For example, in urban areas I often see commuters cycling to work, and in parks families ride bikes for recreation and fitness.

× Yes, I have a bike, so I sometimes ride a bicycle with my friends around my home zone.

✓ Yes, I had a bike, so I sometimes rode a bicycle with my friends around my neighborhood.

The question asks about the past ('when you were a child'), so the student should use past tense verbs. 'Have' should be 'had' and 'ride' should be 'rode' to match past time. 'Home zone' is unnatural; use 'neighborhood' for natural English. Suggestion: match verb tenses to the time frame of the question and prefer natural collocations (home zone -> neighborhood).

× Yes, I think it is popular in my country because anywhere, for example in the park or in the street, I can see a lot of people who are riding a bicycle and I think it is very useful and also good for health.

✓ Yes, I think they are popular in my country because, for example, in parks or on the streets I can see many people riding bicycles, and I think they are very useful and good for health.

The noun 'bikes' is plural, so pronouns and verbs referring to them should be plural ('they are popular' not 'it is popular'). Use plural forms 'parks' and 'streets' for general statements and 'many people' instead of 'a lot of people who are riding a bicycle' which mixes singular/plural. Use 'riding bicycles' (plural) or 'riding a bicycle' with singular reference. Also use 'on the streets' and 'in parks' (preposition correction). Suggestion: ensure pronouns agree in number with their nouns and keep consistent plural usage when speaking generally.