Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변은 직접적이고 자연스럽지만 너무 짧고 구체성이 부족합니다. 주제 문장 이후에 짧은 추가 설명(언제, 어떤 종류의 자전거였는지, 자전거로 무엇을 했는지)을 linking words로 연결하여 문장을 확장하세요. 예: 'Yes, I had a bike when I was a child' 다음에 'and' 또는 'so' 대신 'and I used to' 또는 'which I' 같은 표현으로 구체적 정보를 덧붙이면 더 자연스럽습니다.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small red bicycle with training wheels, and I used to ride it around my neighborhood every afternoon with my friends.

提案: 내용이 전달되지만 문법 오류와 혼동되는 표현(예: 'now I'm leaving Japan')이 있어 이해에 방해가 됩니다. 의견을 명확한 주제 문장으로 시작하고, 이유와 구체적 예시를 linking words(e.g., 'because', 'for example', 'also')로 연결해 문장을 정리하세요. 불필요한 정보는 제거하고 시제와 관사 사용을 확인하세요.

例: Yes, biking is very popular in Korea. For example, many people use bicycles to commute to train stations or to go shopping, and students often cycle to school because it is convenient and inexpensive.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

Sentence is correct; past tense used appropriately for a past possession. No change needed.

× Yes, sure, riding a bike is very popular in Korea and actually now I'm leaving Japan.

✓ Yes, sure, riding a bike is very popular in Korea and actually now I'm living in Japan.

The student used 'leaving' which means to go away from a place. The intended meaning is likely 'living' (residing). Use present continuous 'I'm living' to describe current residence. Suggestion: replace 'leaving' with 'living' when describing where you currently reside.

× Japan is also very popular and the most of the people are riding a bicycle to go station or the market to get some groceries and even the student.

✓ In Japan it is also very common; most people ride bicycles to the station or the market to get groceries, and even students do.

Multiple problems: 'Japan is also very popular' is awkward for the idea of bicycle use—use 'it is also very common.' 'The most of the people' is incorrect quantifier; use 'most people.' 'To go station' needs preposition 'to the station.' 'Get some groceries' is acceptable but 'get groceries' is more natural. 'Even the student' is incorrect singular and missing verb; use 'even students do.' Overall restructure sentence for clarity: 'In Japan it is also very common; most people ride bicycles to the station or the market to get groceries, and even students do.'