Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and use correct tense and reduced redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar: use the past tense consistently (e.g., 'I didn’t have my own bike, but I used my dad’s'). Keep it natural and limit to 2–3 short sentences.

例: No, I didn’t have my own bike when I was a child, but I often used my dad’s bike. For example, I used it to ride to a friend’s house and for short errands around the neighborhood.

提案: Give a clear opinion, then support it with specific, organized reasons and linking words. Avoid fillers like 'uh' and vague phrases such as 'many more.' Use correct phrasing ('it helps with many things' → 'they are useful for many tasks'). Limit to 2–3 sentences and include concrete examples.

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient. For instance, many students ride to school, and vendors use bicycles to transport vegetables to local markets.

× So I didn't have my personal bike, but I use my dad's bike for the further years.

✓ So I didn't have my own bike, but I used my dad's bike for the following years.

The sentence mixes past and present tenses. The context is about childhood (past), so both verbs should be in the past tense. 'Use' should be 'used'. 'Personal bike' is unnatural here; 'own bike' is better. 'Further years' is incorrect collocation; 'following years' or 'for several years' is correct.

× Yes, I do think that bikes are popular in my country because uh, it helps and many things like a simple works to go to schools, to bring some vegetables from the market and many more.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because they help with many simple tasks, such as going to school, bringing vegetables from the market, and more.

Several tense and agreement issues: 'I do think' is acceptable but can be simplified to 'I think'. The plural subject 'bikes' requires the plural pronoun 'they' rather than 'it'. 'Helps and many things' is ungrammatical; use 'help with many simple tasks'. 'a simple works' mixes article and plural; use 'simple tasks' and provide examples with 'such as' and parallel infinitive phrases 'going to school, bringing vegetables'. Removed filler 'uh' and 'many more' replaced with 'and more' for clarity.