Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve tense accuracy and add a concise supporting detail. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then give one specific detail about where or with whom you rode the bike. Keep it to 1–3 sentences and use a linking word if you add details.

例: Yes, I did. I used to ride my red bike in the park near my home every weekend, often with my older brother, which helped me learn to balance and gain confidence.

提案: Correct grammar, pronoun use, and vocabulary; avoid unclear words. Start with a direct opinion sentence, then give clear reasons and one specific example. Use linking words like 'however' or 'now' to show contrast and keep the answer within 2–3 sentences.

例: Bikes used to be very popular in China, but now fewer people cycle because many have switched to electric scooters and cars due to rising incomes. However, cycling is still common in some cities for short trips and among students.

× Yes I do, I used to ride a bike in the park.

✓ Yes, I did; I used to ride a bike in the park.

The examiner asked about the past ('Did you have a bike when you were a child?'), so the response should be in past tense. 'Yes I do' is present tense and mismatches the question. Use 'Yes, I did' to agree with the past question. Also add commas/semicolon for clarity and a space after commas. Suggestion: Match the tense of the question by using past tense responses (e.g., 'Yes, I did. I used to ride a bike...').

× He used to be quite popular in China, but with the development of our economy, many people abandoned this Hobbit. They shifted to EV.

✓ Bicycles used to be quite popular in China, but with the development of our economy many people abandoned this hobby and shifted to electric vehicles.

Several issues: 'He used to be' wrongly uses third-person singular pronoun 'He' when referring to 'bikes' (plural/inanimate). Use a noun 'Bicycles' to match. 'Abandoned this Hobbit' has two errors: 'Hobbit' is a noun for a fictional creature; the intended word is 'hobby'. Also 'abandoned this hobby' is acceptable, but 'many people abandoned this hobby and shifted to electric vehicles' is clearer. 'EV' is informal; spell out 'electric vehicles' for clarity. The sentence also required subject-verb agreement and correct noun choice. Suggestion: Refer clearly to the subject with the correct noun and spelling, keep verb forms consistent, and avoid ambiguous pronouns (e.g., 'Bicycles used to be quite popular...').