Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevap daha doğal ve doğru dilbilgisi ile verilmeli. Konu cümlesinde zaman ifadesini düzeltin ve gerekirse bir detay ekleyin. Ek bilgi verirken bağlaç (because, when, and) kullanın ve maksimum 5 cümlede kalın. Örneğin bisikletten neden hoşlandığınızı veya nasıl kullandığınızı belirtin.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used it almost every day to ride to my friend's house because it was the quickest way to get around. Often, we would race each other in the park, which was great fun.

提案: Cümle yapısını düzeltin ve gereksiz tekrarı kaldırın. Bir değerlendirme yaparken daha spesifik örnekler veya nedenler verin (örneğin şehirlerdeki bisiklet yolları, çocuk modası, çevresel farkındalık). Bağlaçlarla mantıksal akış oluşturun ve tek cümleyle sınırlamayın ama en fazla 5 cümlede kalın.

例: I don't think bikes are very popular overall, although more children seem to be using them nowadays. This is partly because schools and parents encourage outdoor play, and some cities have built new bike lanes that make cycling safer.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The sentence is missing the indefinite article 'a' before the singular noun 'child'. In English, we say 'a child' when referring to a nonspecific singular person. Suggestion: include the article 'a' before singular countable nouns in similar contexts (e.g., 'when I was a child').

× Not much, but nowadays children's are using the bikes nowadays.

✓ Not much, but nowadays children are using bikes.

The original uses the possessive form 'children's' incorrectly and repeats 'nowadays'. Use the plural noun 'children' as the subject, not the possessive. Also, 'the bikes' is unnecessary unless referring to specific bikes; use 'bikes' for general meaning. Suggestion: use the plural noun form for subjects and avoid redundant words (remove duplicate 'nowadays').