Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Correct the grammar and make the response natural and concise. Begin with a clear topic sentence using past tense, then add one brief supporting detail if helpful. Use linking words only if adding details. For example, say whether you enjoyed it or how often you used it.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I rode it almost every day around my neighborhood, and it was my main way of getting to school.

提案: Improve grammar, clarity and word choice. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with correct linking words. Avoid redundancy and correct mistakes like 'the traffic is here is' and 'travel through bike'.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because traffic congestion makes cars slow and expensive. For example, many people find cycling faster for short trips, and cities provide dedicated bike lanes that make riding safer.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The student used present tense 'have' with a past time reference 'when I was a child.' This is a tense mismatch. Use past simple 'had' to match the past time frame. Suggestion: use past tense for actions or states that occurred in the past (I had, I lived, I liked).

× Yes, bikes are more popular in my country because the traffic is here is insane and people are more likely to travel through bike instead of cars.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because the traffic here is insane and people are more likely to travel by bike instead of by car.

Multiple issues related to tense and word choice: 'are more popular' implies comparison without clear reference; 'are very popular' is clearer. The phrase 'the traffic is here is insane' repeats 'is' and misplaces 'here'; correct form is 'the traffic here is insane.' 'Travel through bike' is incorrect preposition and noun number: use 'travel by bike' and 'instead of by car' or 'instead of cars.' Suggestions: remove redundant words, use 'by' for modes of transport, and match singular/plural appropriately.