Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a fuller, natural response: start with a direct answer then add one or two brief supporting details explaining why you didn't have a bike (e.g., family circumstances, safety, or preference). Use a linking word to connect ideas. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. My family couldn’t afford one at the time, so I usually walked to school instead. Because of that, I became used to walking rather than cycling.

提案: Make the answer clearer and more coherent: begin with a topic sentence stating your opinion, then give specific supporting details and a clear comparison. Use linking words (e.g., however, for example) and avoid vague phrases like “City 70.” Name typical places or reasons for popularity and clarify which brands you are comparing.

例: Yes, bicycles and motorbikes are very popular in my country, especially in large cities. For example, in City 70 many people use scooters or small motorcycles for commuting because they are affordable and easy to park. However, brand-wise, Honda motorcycles tend to be more common than some lesser-known local models because they are reliable and have good service networks.

× Yes, they are very popular in my country such as City 70. Honda is much more popular than this bike.

✓ Yes, they are very popular in my country, for example in City 70. Honda bikes are much more popular than these bikes.

The original sentence has pronoun and reference problems. 'They' refers to bikes (plural) which is fine, but 'such as City 70' incorrectly uses a city name after 'such as' and lacks clarity; 'for example in City 70' is clearer. 'Honda is much more popular than this bike' incorrectly treats 'Honda' (a brand) as singular and compares it to 'this bike' (singular) while the context compares types of bikes (plural). Changing to 'Honda bikes are much more popular than these bikes' makes number agreement consistent and clarifies the comparison. Suggestion: match singular/plural consistently and use 'for example' or 'such as' before categories, not specific places without preposition.