Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Good direct response with specific details and coherence. To improve, correct small grammar slips and tighten sentences to avoid redundancy. For example, remove repeated ideas ("I had a bike" and "my father bought me one") by combining them, fix preposition/infinitive errors ("to for me to cycle" should be "for me to cycle"), and replace vague phrases like "short rides" with a brief vivid detail. Keep answers within 3–4 sentences and use a linking word to connect reasons.

例: Yes — my father bought me a bike when I was in primary school, and I rode it to school because our house was only half a kilometre away. As a result, I cycled almost every day; I especially enjoyed racing my friends along the quiet lane on the way home.

提案: Answer addresses the question and contrasts areas, but contains factual/word-choice errors and awkward phrasing ("boys aren't very popular" likely meant "bikes aren't very popular"). Improve by correcting vocabulary mistakes, using clearer linking words (e.g., "however," "on the other hand"), and giving one concise specific example or statistic if possible. Keep language natural and avoid capitalisation errors. Aim for 3–4 sentences with clear topic sentence and supporting reason.

例: It depends on the region. In big cities, bikes are less popular because roads are congested and people usually prefer motorcycles or cars. However, in rural areas cycling is much more common since distances are short and roads are quieter, so many people use bikes as an affordable daily transport option.

× Our house was about 1/2 kilometers from the school so it was much more convenient to for me to cycle there every day.

✓ Our house was about 1/2 kilometer from the school, so it was much more convenient for me to cycle there every day.

Use 'kilometer' not 'kilometers' with a fraction '1/2' (singular after a fraction less than 1). Also remove the extra 'to' after 'convenient'. The correct structure is 'convenient for someone to do something.' Add a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'so' for clarity.

× In big cities, boys aren't very popular because the roads are heavily congested and people usually prefer motorcycles or cars.

✓ In big cities, bikes aren't very popular because the roads are heavily congested and people usually prefer motorcycles or cars.

The original uses 'boys' which is likely a typographical error; context requires the noun 'bikes'. This is a word-choice error affecting singular/plural meaning. Replace 'boys' with 'bikes' to match the intended subject.

× But in rural areas they are much more common since the roads are quieter and the distances are shorter, making cycling A practical and economical option.

✓ But in rural areas they are much more common since the roads are quieter and the distances are shorter, making cycling a practical and economical option.

The article 'A' is capitalized incorrectly. Use lowercase 'a'. Also ensure 'cycling a practical option' keeps the indefinite article 'a' before the noun phrase. This fixes article usage and capitalization.