Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and grammatically correct, avoid repetition, and keep answers concise (max 5 sentences). Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Also correct verb tenses and word choices (e.g., 'had' not 'do had', 'rode' not 'wired', 'played' not 'will play' for past events).

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I rode it every day after school, and I especially liked racing with my friends around the neighborhood. Because we had few other activities, I often rode until it got dark, which helped me become more confident on the road.

提案: Answer directly and avoid filler words. Use clearer organization: give a general statement, then support it with specific reasons and examples, using linking words (e.g., 'however', 'for example'). Correct vocabulary and repetition errors ('buy to buy', 'have a bike'). Aim for one or two concise supporting details rather than repeating the same idea.

例: Bicycles are fairly popular in my country, but their use depends on age and income. For example, many adults without cars cycle to work because it is economical and faster in traffic; however, children from low-income families may not own bikes because their parents prioritize essentials over toys.

× Yes, I I do indeed had a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I did indeed have a bike when I was a child.

The sentence mixes present auxiliary 'do' with past tense 'had.' For past simple, use 'did' as the auxiliary and the base verb 'have.' Correction: 'I did indeed have.' Also remove duplicate 'I.' Suggestion: Use 'I did have' or simply 'I had.'

× I wired it every day after school during that time and I will play until midnight.

✓ I rode it every day after school then, and I would play on it until midnight.

'wired' is incorrect; past tense of 'ride' is 'rode.' The second clause mixes present/future 'will play' with past narrative; use past habit 'would play' or 'played.' Also 'play on it' clarifies playing with the bike. Suggestion: Use consistent past tense for past habits (rode; would play).

× Well, it depends, because if you are an adult and you don't have a car, you need to ride the bike every day to work.

✓ Well, it depends, because if you are an adult and you don't have a car, you need to ride a bike to work every day.

Use 'a bike' instead of 'the bike' for general reference. Also place 'every day' after 'work' for natural word order. Suggestion: For general statements, use 'a' and keep adverb placement natural ('to work every day').

× But if you're a child without the ability to buy to buy a bike, then uh, you can't have a bite.

✓ But if you're a child who cannot afford to buy a bike, then, uh, you can't have one.

Repeated 'to buy' is redundant. 'Without the ability to buy' is awkward; use 'cannot afford to buy.' 'A bite' is a typo; intended 'a bike' or 'one.' Use 'one' to avoid repetition. Suggestion: Say 'cannot afford to buy a bike' or 'can't afford one.'

× So it depends on whether you're adult or a child.

✓ So it depends on whether you're an adult or a child.

Missing article before 'adult.' Use 'an adult.' Suggestion: Remember singular countable nouns usually need an article ('an adult').