Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve clarity, grammar and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then give 1–2 specific supporting details linked with simple connectors. Correct verb forms and remove filler words (uh, um). Keep answers under five sentences. For example, say when you had the bike, how often you used it, and a short reason or memory.

例: Yes, I did. I had a bicycle from about seventh grade and I used it to ride to school almost every day. Because school was not far, cycling was faster than walking and it also helped me stay active.

提案: Make your opinion explicit and support it with two clear, specific reasons linked with connectors (for example, because / secondly / moreover). Use correct vocabulary (children, adults, commuters) and correct collocations (improve physical fitness, commute to work/school). Avoid repetition and filler words.

例: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in my country because they are an inexpensive and convenient way for children and adults to travel short distances. Moreover, many people cycle regularly to improve their physical fitness and save money on transport.

× When I was in uh 7th grade in the secondary school, I must to going to school bye bye.

✓ When I was in seventh grade in secondary school, I had to go to school every day.

Original uses 'must to going' which mixes modal verb form with infinitive and -ing form. 'Must' is followed by a bare infinitive (must go) and not 'to going'. Context indicates past obligation, so use 'had to' + base verb: 'had to go'. Also 'bye bye' seems intended as 'every day' and '7th' can be written as 'seventh' for formality. Suggestion: use 'had to go' for past obligation and 'every day' for frequency.

× So I when it uh, every days, I uh know how to ride by when I was.

✓ So, when I was that age, I knew how to ride a bike.

Original has confused word order and tense: 'every days' is incorrect plural and placement; 'know' should be past 'knew' to match past time reference. 'Ride by' is incorrect preposition; use 'ride a bike' or simply 'ride'. Also phrase 'when I was' needs an object ('that age' or 'in seventh grade'). Suggestion: place time phrase first ('when I was that age'), use simple past 'knew', and 'ride a bike'.

× Do you think bikes are popular in your country?

✓ Do you think bicycles are popular in your country?

The original sentence is acceptable, but 'bikes' is colloquial; for formality 'bicycles' is a clearer singular/plural noun choice. No grammatical error in number, so change is stylistic. Suggestion: use 'bicycles' in formal speech or writing.

× Yes, because, uh, this transportation is suitable for the young children are older are the matures who want to uh, train your strain the heel everyday they can ride by to improve their physical health.

✓ Yes, because this means of transport is suitable for young children, older people, and adults who want to exercise every day; they can ride to improve their physical health.

Original contains incorrect pronouns and noun forms: 'this transportation' is better as 'this means of transport' or 'this mode of transportation'; 'young children are older are the matures' is ungrammatical — use a list 'young children, older people, and adults'. 'Train your strain the heel' is unintelligible; likely meant 'exercise' or 'train their health'. 'Everyday' vs 'every day': use 'every day' for frequency. 'Ride by' is wrong preposition; use 'ride' or 'ride a bike'. Also pronoun 'your' should match subject 'they' so use 'their'. Suggestion: use clear noun phrases, correct pronoun agreement, and simple verbs like 'exercise' or 'improve'.