Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Perbaiki tata bahasa dasar dan kejelasan ide: jelaskan umur Anda saat memiliki sepeda dengan struktur kalimat yang benar, gunakan bentuk kata kerja yang tepat (mis. 'I was five', 'I had a bike'), dan hilangkan pengulangan. Tambahkan satu atau dua detail spesifik yang relevan (mis. siapa yang memberinya, di mana Anda sering menggunakannya, atau kenangan singkat) serta gunakan penghubung sederhana untuk kelancaran (mis. 'and', 'so', 'because').

例: I had a bike when I was five years old and it was my favorite. It was pink and my parents bought it for my birthday. I rode it almost every day around my neighborhood, so I became quite confident riding by the time I started fourth grade.

提案: Perjelas pendapat dengan struktur yang lebih rapi dan gunakan kosakata yang tepat (mis. 'popular', 'generations', 'trend'). Berikan alasan yang lebih spesifik dan contoh konkret, gunakan penghubung logis seperti 'because', 'for example', atau 'for instance'. Hindari frasa yang tidak perlu seperti pengulangan 'actually' dan pastikan kesesuaian subjek-kata kerja (mis. 'the new generation is' bukan 'are').

例: Yes, I think bikes are becoming more popular in my country because people are more health-conscious and want to reduce pollution. For example, my city organizes a weekly car-free day, so many residents ride bicycles then, and more bike lanes have been built recently to support this trend.

× Yes, when I was a child, I think it's about 5 years old.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I think I was about 5 years old.

Penggunaan 'it's' tidak tepat karena subjek seharusnya merujuk pada usia subjek di masa lalu; bentuk waktu harus past tense. Gunakan 'I was' untuk menyatakan usia di masa lalu. Suggestion: Use past tense 'I was about 5 years old' when referring to age in the past.

× I I have a bike, it was my favorite.

✓ I had a bike; it was my favorite.

Konteks berbicara tentang masa lalu sehingga 'have' harus dalam bentuk lampau 'had'. Selain itu dua klausa harus dipisahkan dengan tanda baca yang benar. Suggestion: Use 'had' for past possession and separate clauses with a semicolon or period.

× It's color is pink and I can't write it when I was in the 4th grade because I don't really.

✓ Its color was pink, and I couldn't ride it when I was in the 4th grade because I didn't really practice a lot.

Beberapa kesalahan: 'It's' (it is) salah karena seharusnya possessive 'its'; tense harus past ('was') untuk mendeskripsikan warna di masa lalu; 'can't write' salah kata—seharusnya 'couldn't ride' untuk kemampuan di masa lalu; kalimat terputus 'because I don't really' harus lengkap menjadi 'because I didn't really practice a lot.' Suggestion: Use correct possessive 'its', past tense verbs 'was' and 'couldn't', and complete the reason clause with 'didn't really practice a lot'.

× I believe it's a yes because nowadays the new generation are trying to make a new habit that is pretty good.

✓ I believe it's a yes because nowadays the new generation is trying to develop a good habit.

'New generation' sebagai noun phrase kolektif dianggap tunggal dalam konteks ini sehingga harus memakai 'is' bukan 'are'. 'Make a new habit that is pretty good' canggung; lebih alami 'develop a good habit'. Suggestion: Use 'is' for collective noun and prefer 'develop a good habit' for natural phrasing.

× So actually in my city there is a car free day which people actually mostly use bike for day.

✓ So actually in my city there is a car-free day when people mostly use bicycles for the day.

Beberapa perbaikan: 'car free day' harus 'car-free day' (hyphen) atau 'a day without cars'; 'which' kurang tepat untuk waktu, gunakan 'when'; 'use bike' perlu plural 'bicycles' atau 'use bikes'; 'for day' harus 'for the day'. Suggestion: Use 'when' for time clauses, plural 'bicycles' and 'for the day' to indicate duration.