Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more coherent and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, remove hesitations, and add one specific supporting detail. Use appropriate linking words to connect ideas. Also correct inaccurate phrasing (e.g., “learned reading writing bike” is unclear) and avoid repeating the same point.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I learned to ride it with my sister when I was about seven, and we often rode to the park on weekends. Because of that, I became confident cycling on busy roads.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (subject-verb agreement), and add one specific example or comparison. Use a linking word to explain reasons or give an example to make the answer more persuasive.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For example, many children use bicycles to travel to school and shops because they are affordable and convenient, especially in crowded cities.

× I learned reading writing bike with my sister.

✓ I learned to read and write and to ride a bike with my sister.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'learned' followed by bare gerunds and omits necessary infinitives and conjunctions. Use 'learned to + verb' for skills (learned to read, learned to write, learned to ride a bike) and connect items with 'and' for clarity. Also add articles where needed ('a bike').

× I had a bike. Oh wait, I forgot. So.

✓ I had a bike, but I forgot to mention that earlier.

The original fragments 'Oh wait, I forgot. So.' are incomplete and create unclear meaning. Combine into a single complete sentence that conveys the intended idea and uses proper connectors ('but') and verb forms ('forgot to mention').

× Yeah, I think it's very popular in our country because every kid in the city use bike to go out or go to school.

✓ Yeah, I think it's very popular in our country because every kid in the city uses a bike to go out or go to school.

Subject 'every kid' is singular and requires singular verb 'uses' (subject-verb agreement). Also add the article 'a' before 'bike' and use 'uses a bike' for correct English. The rest of the sentence matches present-tense general statement.