Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Speak more clearly and organize your answer with a direct topic sentence, a clear reason, and one brief supporting detail. Avoid unclear fragments and incorrect grammar (e.g., "my family was not" is incomplete). Use linking words like "because" or "so" correctly. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. My parents thought I should learn to ride a bicycle only when I was older, because they worried about safety. So I usually walked or used public transport instead.

提案: Start with a clear direct answer, then give one specific reason and an example. Avoid hesitations and incomplete sentences. Use linking words like "because", "for example" and finish the thought (e.g., "people use bikes there"). Try to include a short consequence or comparison.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many old neighborhoods have very narrow streets where cars cannot go. For example, in the historic center people often use bicycles to run errands or deliver goods, so bikes are very practical there.

× No, actually I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my family was not.

✓ No, actually I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my family couldn't afford one.

The original sentence uses 'was not' incorrectly; it lacks a clear verb and meaning. The intended idea is that the family did not have the financial means, which requires a past-tense modal phrase (couldn't afford) rather than 'was not.' Use a clear past-tense construction to match 'didn't have.' Suggest learning common collocations like 'couldn't afford' to express lack of resources.

× My family like says that a child first learn how to ride a bicycle, then only a child could ride a bike.

✓ My family says that a child should first learn how to ride a bicycle; only then can the child ride a bike.

Multiple issues: 'like says' is informal and incorrect; use 'says.' 'A child first learn' has subject-verb agreement and tense errors: 'a child' (singular) requires 'learns' or use modal 'should learn.' Also sentence order and modality are awkward. The corrected version uses present-tense reporting 'says' and the modal 'should' to express recommendation, plus inversion 'only then can the child' for clarity. Focus on subject-verb agreement and appropriate modal verbs for advice.

× So that's why.

✓ So that's why I didn't have a bike.

The fragment 'So that's why.' lacks a clear reference; it is a sentence fragment that doesn't fully connect to the previous idea. Adding 'I didn't have a bike' completes the thought and clarifies the consequence. Practice making complete sentences that restate the result when using 'so' or 'that's why.'

× Actually, yes, bikes are popular in my country because in my country there are some areas which are so narrow be uh, so narrow that there can't be any.

✓ Actually, yes, bikes are popular in my country because some areas are so narrow that cars cannot go there.

The original has redundancy ('in my country' twice), filler words, and the odd phrase 'there can't be any' which is ungrammatical. Use present simple 'are' for general facts and a clear negative modal 'cannot' for inability. Remove fillers and redundant phrases. Also replace 'go there' for natural expression instead of 'be any.'

× We can't take any car to that narrow places.

✓ We can't take cars to those narrow places.

Incorrect article and number agreement: 'any car' with 'that narrow places' is inconsistent. Use plural 'cars' and plural demonstrative 'those' to match 'places.' Also 'can't take' is acceptable but 'drive' or 'bring' could be more natural. Ensure noun and demonstrative/pronoun agreement.

× So the people.

✓ So people use bikes there.

'So the people.' is an incomplete fragment lacking a verb and clear meaning. Completing it as 'So people use bikes there.' provides subject, verb, and object and ties back to the previous reason. Practice forming full sentences rather than fragments.