Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct, grammatically correct and add a brief supporting detail. Start with a clear topic sentence referring to the past, use correct tense, and give one specific reason or brief experience. Keep it under five sentences and use a linking word if adding detail.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. I never learned to ride, so I didn’t ask my parents to buy one. As a result, I usually walked to school or took public transport instead.

提案: Answer directly, correct unclear phrases, and give a specific reason or example. Use linking words to connect ideas and choose vocabulary relevant to transport and popularity. Avoid vague or incorrect words like “translation form.”

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For example, many people in cities use bicycles for their daily commute because they are cheap and convenient. In addition, bike lanes and shared cycling schemes have made cycling safer and more common.

× No, I can't ride a bicycle until now, so I didn't ask my parents to buy a bike when I was a child.

✓ No, I still can't ride a bicycle, so I didn't ask my parents to buy a bike when I was a child.

The student used 'can't' with 'until now' which is awkward for ongoing inability; 'still can't' correctly expresses continued inability in the present. Also 'until now' is typically used with perfect tenses; using 'still' suits simple present. The rest of the sentence correctly refers to a past decision, so maintain the past tense 'didn't ask'. Suggestion: use 'still can't' or 'have never been able to' for clarity (e.g., 'I still can't ride a bicycle' or 'I have never been able to ride a bicycle').

× Of course. Black is an important translation form for many people. They go work on it usually.

✓ Of course. Bicycles are an important means of transportation for many people. They usually ride them to work.

The original contains incorrect lexical choices: 'Black' appears to be a mistake for 'bikes' and 'translation form' is incorrect for 'transportation'. This is a word choice error best classified under incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs or overall sentence structure. Also 'They go work on it usually' has incorrect verb pattern and pronoun reference. Correct form: 'They usually ride them to work.' Suggestions: use accurate vocabulary ('bicycles', 'means of transportation') and correct verb patterns ('ride them to work', adverb placement before main verb 'usually').