Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar and tense consistency, provide a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details using linking words. Use past tense for childhood events and avoid redundancy. For example, start with a direct answer, then add details (who you rode with, where, or a memorable moment) and a brief reason or feeling.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I rode it every day around my neighborhood with my friends, and it helped me feel independent and confident.

提案: Make the sentence natural and grammatically correct, give a specific reason and an example, and use linking words like "because" or "so" for coherence. Avoid vague phrases and incorrect pronouns; use 'we' correctly and provide context such as commuting, cost, or traffic.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them to commute to work and school. For example, during rush hour you can see lots of cyclists on dedicated bike lanes, since cycling is cheaper and often faster than driving.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was a child there.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The student used present tense 'have' with a past time expression 'when I was a child'. This is a tense mismatch. Use the past simple 'had' to match the past time. Suggestion: use past tense verbs for events that occurred in the past (e.g., 'I had a bike').

× I ride it every day.

✓ I rode it every day.

The context is a past habitual action described with a past time frame ('when I was a child'), so the verb should be in the past simple 'rode' rather than present simple 'ride'. Suggestion: for habitual actions in the past use 'used to' or past simple (e.g., 'I rode it every day' or 'I used to ride it every day').

× Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because this is we used every day.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because we use them every day.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and pronoun usage: 'this is we used' is ungrammatical. Also tense should match general present habit ('are popular' implies present). Use subject 'we' + present verb 'use' and plural object pronoun 'them' to refer to 'bikes'. Suggestion: maintain subject-verb-object order and use correct pronouns (e.g., 'we use them every day').