Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 문법과 시제 오류를 바로잡고 문장을 더 자연스럽게 연결하세요. 예: 과거 사실을 말할 때는 과거 시제를 사용해야 하고, 중복 표현(three three wheel)은 제거해야 합니다. 또한 주제문 다음에 한두 개의 구체적 세부사항(예: 몇 살 때, 누구와 타곤 했는지)을 연결어(for example, because 등)를 사용해 덧붙이면 더 풍부한 답변이 됩니다.

例: Yes, I did. When I was about six years old, my parents bought me a three-wheeled bike. I used to ride it around our neighborhood every afternoon, and my older sister often cycled with me for company.

提案: 응답을 더 명확하고 논리적으로 구성하세요. 주제문을 말한 뒤 이유를 연결어(and, because, for example)를 사용하여 구체적으로 설명하고, 어색한 표현('Triggering work')은 적절한 단어로 바꾸세요. 또한 불필요한 망설임(umm)은 줄이고 문장을 2~3문장으로 간결하게 유지하세요.

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular. Many people use them to commute, especially for going to work or school, because they are cheap and convenient in busy city streets. For example, I often see students and office workers cycling during rush hour.

× Yes, I have a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike.

The question asks about the past ('Did you have a bike when you were a child?'), so the student should use past tense. Using 'have' is present tense and conflicts with the time frame. Change to 'had' to match past time reference. Suggestion: Use past tense verbs when the context indicates past time (e.g., 'when I was a child').

× When I was young my parents buy a three three wheel bike and I run my rent myself.

✓ When I was young my parents bought a three-wheel bike and I rode it by myself.

Multiple errors: 'buy' should be past tense 'bought' to match 'When I was young'. 'three three wheel' is incorrect; use 'three-wheel' or 'tricycle'. 'I run my rent myself' is ungrammatical and unclear; likely intended meaning is 'I rode it by myself' (past action). Also subject-verb agreement requires past tense for all verbs referring to past time. Suggestion: Ensure verbs referring to past events are in past tense (bought, rode). Use correct noun forms ('three-wheel bike' or 'tricycle') and express actions clearly ('rode it by myself').

× I think yes, many people use the bikes.

✓ Yes, I think many people use bikes.

The phrase 'I think yes' is awkward; 'Yes, I think' is natural. 'the bikes' implies specific bikes; general statements about a category normally omit the article: 'use bikes' or use 'bicycles'. Suggestion: For general statements, omit 'the' before plural countable nouns, and order words naturally ('Yes, I think many people use bikes').

× Umm. Triggering work, go work or go to the school and sometimes.

✓ They use bikes to commute to work or to go to school sometimes.

Fragmented sentence and incorrect phrase 'Triggering work' (nonsense) and 'go to the school' (unnecessary 'the'). Use 'commute to work' or 'go to school'. Also combine into a complete sentence with subject 'They' referring to people. Suggestion: Avoid fragments; use complete sentences and common collocations such as 'commute to work' and 'go to school'. Omit 'the' before 'school' when speaking generally.