Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Correct the grammar and make the answer concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No + brief detail), then add one or two specific supporting details. Use past simple for facts about childhood and keep it to maximum five sentences. For example, say which age you got the bike, how often you used it, or a short memory to enrich the answer.

例: Yes, I did. I got my first bike when I was seven and I rode it almost every day after school. I particularly remember learning to ride on the quiet street near my house with my older cousin helping me.

提案: Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No + reason), then add two specific supporting points linked with clear connectors (for example, 'because' and 'however'). Avoid filler words (like 'like') and repeated phrases. Give concrete examples and keep it within five sentences.

例: No, I don't think bikes are very popular in Jordan because there are few dedicated bike lanes and the roads can be unsafe for cyclists. As a result, people who cycle usually do so in parks rather than on city streets. Additionally, many people prefer social activities like sitting in coffee shops or smoking shisha, so cycling is not a common pastime.

× Uh, yes, I was having a bike when I was children.

✓ Uh, yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The student used the past continuous 'was having' which is incorrect for possession in the past; simple past 'had' is appropriate. Also 'children' (plural) is incorrect for referring to oneself; use singular 'child'. Suggestion: use simple past for past possession and match singular/plural: 'I had a bike when I was a child.'

× Actually, it's not very popular in Jordan because like there's no specific roads for them.

✓ Actually, bikes are not very popular in Jordan because there are no specific roads for them.

The original uses 'it's' which refers to a singular subject but the topic is plural 'bikes'; use plural 'bikes are'. Also 'there's' (there is) is singular; use 'there are' for plural 'roads'. Suggestion: ensure subject number matches verb number: 'Bikes are not very popular... there are no specific roads for them.'

× If you want to use your bike, there is like you just and you can just use it inside the gardens, public gardens and then the public gardens.

✓ If you want to use your bike, you can only use it inside public gardens.

The original sentence is repetitive and ungrammatical ('there is like you just and you can just' and repeated 'public gardens'). Simplify and use modal 'can' for ability and adverb 'only' to express restriction. Suggestion: make structure concise: 'If you want to use your bike, you can only use it inside public gardens.'

× Most of the people you need don't have these concepts about sport.

✓ Most people here don't have this concept of sports.

'Most of the people you need' is incorrect and unclear; likely intended 'most people here'. 'Don't have these concepts about sport' is awkward; use singular 'concept' and pluralize 'sports' or use 'sport' consistently. Suggestion: say 'Most people here don't have the concept of sports' or 'don't think about sports.'

× All of them is just sitting and have shisha or drinking coffee there.

✓ They are mostly just sitting, smoking shisha, or drinking coffee there.

Subject-verb agreement: 'All of them is' should be 'They are' or 'All of them are'. Also verb forms were inconsistent: 'sitting and have shisha or drinking coffee' mixes forms. Use parallel gerunds: 'sitting, smoking shisha, or drinking coffee.' Suggestion: keep subject-verb agreement and parallel structure: 'They are mostly just sitting, smoking shisha, or drinking coffee.'