Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer direct, fluent, and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No and brief reason). Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Use one or two supporting details (when/how you learned to ride, or why you didn’t have one). Keep it within 2–4 sentences and use linking words like “but” or “until” to connect ideas.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike as a child because I hadn’t learned how to ride. My parents didn’t buy one for me, and I only learned to ride last year. As a result, I bought my first bike just last week and I’ve been practicing on quiet roads.

提案: Answer directly and organize ideas logically. Begin with a clear opinion (Yes/No and why). Use linking words (because, so, therefore) and give specific supporting details or examples (urban traffic, cost, parking). Avoid unclear phrases and repetition. Limit to 2–4 coherent sentences.

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because they are faster than cars in heavy city traffic. For example, many commuters use motorcycles to get to work quickly and to avoid long parking searches. Also, bikes are cheaper to run, which makes them a practical choice for many people.

× Well during my childhood I I don't know how to draw drive a bike so my parents never bought me.

✓ Well, during my childhood I didn't know how to ride a bike, so my parents never bought one for me.

Multiple issues: incorrect verb tense and form (should use past simple 'didn't know' for a past state) and wrong verb selection ('ride' not 'drive' for a bike). 'Draw' is incorrect here and appears to be an error; remove it. Also use 'one' or 'a bike' after 'bought' and add 'for me' for clarity. Suggestion: use past simple for childhood facts and the correct verb 'ride' when talking about bicycles. Grammar problem type ID:26

× But these days I know the skill to drive a bike so I bought it last week.

✓ But these days I know how to ride a bike, and I bought one last week.

Mixed tenses and wrong verb choice: 'these days' suggests present simple ('I know how to ride'), which is correct, but 'the skill to drive a bike' is awkward — use 'know how to ride a bike'. The purchase 'I bought it last week' is past simple and is fine, but refer to 'one' or 'a bike' for clarity. Also connect ideas with 'and'. Grammar problem type ID:5

× Will in my reception bikes are at a peak rather than other transport as in the cities there are huge traffic, so to reach to the workplace or at any particular place, bike is the one way through which person can go easily rather than on bikes or on.

✓ Well, in my region bikes are more popular than other forms of transport because cities have heavy traffic, so to get to the workplace or other places, a bike is an easy way for a person to travel.

Many pronoun and article issues plus sentence structure problems: 'Will' should be 'Well' or 'Well,'; 'reception' is wrong — likely 'region'. 'Bikes are at a peak' is unidiomatic; use 'more popular'. 'Huge traffic' should be 'heavy traffic'. 'To reach to the workplace' should be 'to get to the workplace' (remove extra 'to'). Use articles: 'a bike' and 'a person'. The ending 'rather than on bikes or on' is incomplete and unclear — remove it and rephrase. Suggestion: simplify sentence into clear clauses: reason then result, use correct articles and collocations ('heavy traffic', 'get to'). Grammar problem type ID:11