Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời thiếu rõ ràng và mắc lỗi ngữ pháp. Hãy trả lời trực tiếp với câu chủ đề (ví dụ: "Yes, I had a bike" hoặc "No, I didn’t have a bike"), sau đó nếu cần giải thích ngắn gọn nguyên nhân hoặc một kỉ niệm liên quan. Tránh từ thừa như "anybody" ở chỗ không phù hợp và dùng thì quá khứ chính xác (had / didn’t have). Giữ không quá 3-4 câu để tự nhiên và hiệu quả.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. My parents couldn’t afford one at the time, so I usually walked or took the bus to school. I remember watching my friends ride around the neighborhood and wishing I could join them.

提案: Câu trả lời có ý chính nhưng hơi lộn xộn, nhiều tiếng ướt và cấu trúc không mạch lạc. Hãy bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng (Yes/No + brief reason), dùng liên từ để nối ý (because, however, therefore) và cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: nơi nào phổ biến, lý do như tiết kiệm chi phí, sức khỏe, giao thông). Hạn chế tiếng lấp đầy (uh, um) và rút gọn trong 2–4 câu rõ ràng.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in small towns and among students, because they are affordable and convenient. Many people prefer cycling short distances to avoid traffic and save money on fuel. In addition, cycling is seen as a healthy way to commute.

× Umm, I don't have anybody ever when I was a child.

✓ Umm, I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

The student used incorrect pronouns and verb tense. 'Anybody' is wrong for referring to an object; use the noun 'a bike'. The question asked about possession in the past, so use past tense 'didn't have' instead of 'don't have'. Also 'ever' is unnecessary and unnatural here. Suggestion: use 'I didn't have a bike when I was a child.'

× OK, there are so many popular transportations in my country uh, instead, I would like to choose uh, a bike over uh, the others because a bike is really useful and easy to use.

✓ OK, there are so many popular modes of transport in my country; however, I would choose a bike over the others because a bike is really useful and easy to use.

'Transportations' is not correct; the uncountable or collective term is 'transport' or the plural 'modes of transport'. 'Instead' is better replaced with 'however' for contrast. 'I would like to choose' is wordy; 'I would choose' or 'I prefer' is more natural. Keep article use consistent: 'a bike' and 'the others' are fine. Suggestion: use 'modes of transport' and simplify the clause to 'I would choose a bike over the others.'