Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clearer and more grammatical. Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid fillers, correct tense and word choice, and add one supporting detail using a linking word. For example, say when you got the bike, who taught you, and how you practiced. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes. I had a bike when I was six because my father taught me to ride it. After he showed me the basics, I practiced every day for a few weeks until I felt confident.

提案: Organize your answer and be specific. Start with a clear opinion about popularity, then give reasons or comparisons using linking words (for example, because / whereas). Avoid unclear phrases and incorrect word choice. Mention specific factors such as infrastructure, safety, or culture to support your view.

例: I don't think bikes are very popular in my country because most people use cars and there are safety concerns. For example, bike lanes are limited and urban areas have high traffic, whereas in countries like the Netherlands or Korea, cycling is much more common due to better infrastructure.

× Yes, I have like, uh, my when I was 6, my father told me that is lighting a bike. So I practice more and I ride a bike.

✓ When I was six, my father taught me how to ride a bike. So I practiced a lot and I could ride a bike.

Multiple problems: incorrect pronoun/use of possessive ('my when I was 6' is ungrammatical) and wrong verb choice ('told me that is lighting a bike' is incorrect). This falls under incorrect use of pronouns because the sentence uses 'my' incorrectly and fails to reference the object properly. Correct form uses 'When I was six' to set time, 'my father taught me how to ride a bike' uses the correct verb 'teach' and the correct structure 'how to + verb'. Use past tense 'practiced' to match the past time frame and 'could ride' or 'I could ride a bike' to indicate ability achieved. Suggestion: keep time clause at start, use 'taught me how to ride' and match past tense consistently.

× US in my country bike is very far from low for instance.

✓ In the US and my country, bikes are not very common.

The original sentence shows incorrect word order and singular/plural mismatch ('bike is' instead of 'bikes are') and unclear phrasing. This fits singular and plural issue because 'bike' should be plural when speaking generally. Correction: reorder phrase to 'In the US and my country' and use plural 'bikes are' and 'not very common' to express rarity. Suggestion: use plural nouns for general statements and use clear comparative phrasing.

× Crime scene is many of many.

✓ There are many crime scenes.

This is a sentence structure error: word order and use of quantifier are incorrect. It lacks the proper 'there are' construction for stating existence and uses 'many of many' redundantly. Correction uses 'There are many crime scenes' to express the idea clearly. Suggestion: use 'there is/there are' for existence and place quantifiers ('many') before the noun.

× Korea has many bicycles.

✓ Korea has many bicycles.

This sentence is grammatically correct as written. It appropriately uses plural 'bicycles' to indicate quantity and correct verb 'has'. No change needed. Suggestion: none; maintain subject-verb agreement and plural form for general quantity.

× So deep has a bike.

✓ So there are many bikes.

The original is ungrammatical and unclear ('deep has a bike' makes no sense). This is a sentence structure error. Likely intended meaning is that there are many bikes, so use 'There are many bikes' or 'So there are many bicycles.' Suggestion: use 'there are' to indicate existence and plural noun to indicate quantity.