Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Structure your reply directly and clearly. Start with a concise topic sentence (Yes/No), then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler sounds (uh, um) and correct tense mistakes (use past tense consistently). Keep answers to a maximum of 3–4 sentences.

例: No, I didn’t have my own bike at the very beginning. Later, when I was old enough to ride safely and after I got my learner licence, I bought a bicycle and used it to travel long distances to school. It became my main way of getting around.

提案: Give a clear direct answer (Yes/No) then support it with specific reasons and an example. Use linking words (because, for example, therefore) and avoid vague or repetitive phrases. Use more precise vocabulary (commute, personal vehicle, public transport) and keep to 2–3 supporting sentences.

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because they are an affordable and convenient way to commute short distances. For example, many people prefer motorbikes to buses since they save time in traffic and cost less to maintain. Therefore, bikes are often more common than public transport for daily travel.

× No, uh, when I was a child, I have a bicycle which I used to, uh, take over a long way and, uh, from, I think when I get my learning license, I got my own bike.

✓ No, when I was a child, I had a bicycle which I used to take for long trips, and I got my own bike when I received my learner's license.

The student mixes present perfect/present forms with past context. 'I have' is present but the rest of the sentence refers to childhood, so it should be past 'I had'. 'When I get my learning license' is incorrect for a past event; use past form 'when I received my learner's license'. Also 'take over a long way' is unnatural; use 'take for long trips'. Use 'learner's license' or 'learning license' consistently. Suggestion: keep verb tense consistent (use past tense for past events) and use natural collocations like 'take for long trips' and 'received my learner's license'.

× Well, I feel yes, because so many people are having bikes for their easy transportation and if you want to go outside wherever we went, so we'll carry our own vehicle so it is easier for transportation.

✓ Well, I think so, because many people have bikes for easy transportation, and when they want to go out, they take their own vehicle, which makes travel easier.

Problems: 'I feel yes' is unnatural; use 'I think so'. 'are having bikes' incorrectly uses continuous; simple present 'have' is correct for general facts. 'if you want to go outside wherever we went' mixes tenses and perspectives; use consistent general statements in simple present: 'when they want to go out'. 'we'll carry our own vehicle' is awkward; 'take their own vehicle' is clearer. Suggestion: use simple present for general truths and keep subject perspective consistent (use third person plural 'they' or first person plural 'we' consistently).

× And also in our country it is more popular than any other service transportation.

✓ Also, in our country it is more popular than other public transportation services.

'Any other service transportation' is an incorrect prepositional and collocation choice. 'Service transportation' is not natural; use 'public transportation services' or 'other modes of public transport'. Also 'more popular than any other' is acceptable but 'than other' is simpler and clearer. Suggestion: use correct noun phrases and prepositions: 'other public transportation services'.